Blood red stains the surface of the intertwining petals. Like a tightly wound knot it keeps its grip. Clasping around its own heart, letting the center of it just barely see the light that strained to give it life. Large thorns thrust them self from its body, ready for the soft hand that would unwittingly pierce itself on them. Yearning for the high pitched scream that would rent the air asunder. Relishing the taste of blood as it slid sinisterly down its stem as the screams turned to tears. The wails of its victim excited it, and made it want to spread itself out. To take in the beautiful misery it had caused. But it could not move. It would wait there until a rubber hand would pluck it from the brush. Breaking the thorns that gave it joy, and then the very people it had oppressed would watch as it wilted and died in the windowsill.
The sun beat down on its mangled corpse as its torturers plucked it once again from its perch. Tossing it in the garbage, the lid closing over its broken form. Then all was black...
wow..... my ex used to give me roses all the time! and I felt like
"the sun beat down on its mangled corpse as its torturers plucked it once again from its perch. Tossing it in the garbage, the lid closing over its broken form. Then all was black..."
after I left.........
wow...... powerful! Great write, great imagery.... so descriptive and right on!
I like how describe this rose so detailed and perfect that it makes me want to take in its scent and beauty in real life. I loved this description and that you portrayed this rose so perfect. I feel like I want to write a whole book about it.
This is going in my library :)
Posted 12 Years Ago
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12 Years Ago
Sweet! Thank you so much for reading I'm really glad you enjoyed my work!
Damn man, that's a really good poem. It's got a sadistic tinge to it and the more you read it the better it gets.That's A compliment from a newbie that tends to write violent poems.
Posted 12 Years Ago
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12 Years Ago
lol I tend to be a more narcissistic person myself so I'm glad you caught the darker tone. Either w.. read morelol I tend to be a more narcissistic person myself so I'm glad you caught the darker tone. Either way I'm thrilled you enjoyed my work thank you so much for reading!
Every rose has it's thorn, 'ey? An enchantingly dark look at the beautiful elegance of a rose. Much like lovers to some, once the rose has fulfilled it's purpose and lost it's luster, it is discarded and thrown away, wilted and forgotten...
Stunning!
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12 Years Ago
Love the review my friend! I really appreciate your input and your perspective on my work is quite .. read moreLove the review my friend! I really appreciate your input and your perspective on my work is quite interesting! Thanks for reading!
I enjoyed this for three reasons:
Firstly, the personification of the rose. Not many poems that I have read about love and sybolism to do with roses are very satisfying... but this one, well, I love it.
Secondly, it's not cliched like most love poems. It's not talking about the actual people involved...it's just centred on the rose...
Thirdly, it's not technically a poem... but it is still poetic. This is my favourite type of riting.
Posted 12 Years Ago
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12 Years Ago
Thank you! I'm really glad you enjoyed my writing thank you so much for reading!
I have been writing for as long as I can remember. I have been featured in about 4 books, have won several contests for my work and currently have a paperback edition of my works. (Titled "A Winter Wa.. more..