The Two Lovers

The Two Lovers

By: Ethan West

This is the ballad

When all is not well

When a line must be drawn

Between heaven and hell

It started with something

Something peaceful, and strange

The bright gates of gold

And heaven's great range

But where was my love

Who I'd left behind?

Was she still down below

In an earth so unkind?

I walked to the gate

My mind lost in thought

As the angel approached

I knew what I sought

That if heaven was mine

Then was heaven wrong?

I was nothing compared

To my love and her song

An angel then asked

"Do you wish to come in?

To forget all your worries

In forgiven sin?"

I then asked the angel

"Where is my love?"

He pointed his hand

With the grace of a dove

The clouds had now parted

I could see within

I saw her on fire

I saw her in sin

I then asked the angel

"Why is she here?

She is better than I

Is that not plainly clear?"

The angel then asked

"Then why are you here?

She's been judged to be damned

And the reason is clear."

I thought in cold silence

And angel then asked

"Would you like to come in?

Your sorrow wont last"

I opened my mouth

Than closed it again

The angel looked puzzled

By what he heard then

I asked him and pleaded

To trade with her place

I begged on my knees

For God's loving grace

And the angel then said

"Are you sure you want this?

To take on her sins

So she may have bliss?"

I paused, and then nodded

With a deep breath I fell

Without scream, without shout

To the bowels of hell

But when I had landed

In the fire, my fee

I looked to my side

At my love next to me

"Why are you here?

I yelled o'er the mass

Of souls of the damned

From present and past

Had I been fooled by an angel

My eyes brought to tear

Until then she told  me

"I would rather be here.

My heaven was hell

Without you by my side

Do you feel the same?

Or is it just I?"

I stared at her smile

As she stared in my eyes

And I shouted I love you

Over the screaming and cries

She smiled back at me

But tears filled her face

They were all tears of pain

In this terrible place

But then her eyes opened

And she opened mine

In a bed of white cloud

With no passing of time

And at the great gate

Of heaven we asked

"Are we then forgiven

For all of our past?"

And the lord came to us

And his smile was wide

He said come to me now

And be by my side

And while I never will know

What happened before

With her by my side

I could want nothing more

Author's Note

The one and only ballad I've ever written. Would love feedback on it if you guys have time.

Reviews

[Lizbeth]

Wow, this is just an amazing and beautiful pieace of poetry, so moving and with some powerful imagery.
It would be nice to know that if one lands in hell, there might be a chance to escape :)
Was relieved there was a happy end ... !
Thanks for sharing.
Lizbeth

[ewest1220]

Wow thanks! I'm really glad you enjoyed my work and thank you so much for reading!

[arvin]

wow. this is so awesome! i really love this.

[The Rainmaker]

I don't feel there are words enough to describe what you have written here. So i'm not going to do it the disgrace of trying. Thank you.

[ewest1220]

lol thank you as well!

[Ian H Morrison]

wow this is excellent lets get that straight first your metres are good well thought out and planned you have then managed to slickly put them in to stanzas and the result is one of the sweetest ballads i have read well done

[ewest1220]

Wow thanks! I'm really glad you enjoyed it thank you so much for reading!

[Elaenor Aisling]

Lovely lovely work. I greatly enjoyed reading this. I

[ewest1220]

Thanks! Glad you liked it!

[Erika Jones]

This is a good poem. I'm not religious or anything, but it's a great poem. It shows that true love for another knows no bounds.

[ewest1220]

I'm moderate myself ^_^ either way I'm really quite thrilled you enjoyed my work thank you so much!

[Erika Jones]

You're most welcome :) I enjoy everyone's work that I read. Everyone's so talented!

[IcYLuVa]

Wow.. There are no words to describe this, except it's purely amazing. I believe this is what true love is all about. It's nice to be reminded that some people still understand that. Nice work, keep writing more, please :)

[ewest1220]

Will do ;) I'm really thrilled you enjoyed my work thank you so much for reading!

[Brandon Mathis]

i really like the tale of to loved ones, brilliant!!

[ewest1220]

Thanks man I'm glad you liked it!

[Brandon Mathis]

your welcom

[Timeless-Chan]

If you love someone you should love them even in the depths on hell:') beautiful!

[ewest1220]

Thanks!

[Morrigan Nicole]

A lovely tale of true love, forgiveness, and hope. I dont think you could have done anything to improve this one bit.

[ewest1220]

Sweet! The ballad feel was an interesting change of pace for me so I'm glad you enjoyed it!