Doubt

Doubt

A Poem by ewest1220
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For wherein my sight my eyes see not...

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Doubt

By: Ethan West


I say here on this bed tonight

Frozen with a painted fear

That all the beauty of my fight

For life itself that's never near


For wherein my sight my eyes see not

This broken field of grass so still

Where in it's wind blows distant thought

Of my broken battered will


Thoughts of fury and of hate

Of love and beauty incarnate

Thoughts of family and of friends

Crying out to make amends


But in this field I draw a blank

Lonely tears to nourish fate

All these thoughts lay in my wake

My broken spirit lies in wait


For once this man was better found

The battered broken grass did plea

I held my head, and stood my ground

And the field of doubt buried me

© 2012 ewest1220


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ewest1220
Any feedback would be greatly appreciated.

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Do you have any of your work punished? like the poems on here a least? Cause you write all this and all i can think is 1- that im insanily jealous of you because you seem to write so easily and 2- that if it isn't published it should be. I mean what the heck! stop being so good at this lmao!

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

ewest1220

12 Years Ago

Actually yes I am published here's the link

http://www.amazon.com/A-Winter-Walk-ebook/.. read more



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a very interesting and lovely poem...........

"Thoughts of fury and of hate
Of love and beauty incarnate
Thoughts of family and of friends
Crying out to make amends"

i sorely like these lines........the emotions that you have put in it is really very powerful and touching.i really like the way you express them with your strong words...though i would like to ask you something...

"The battered broken grass did plea'.i think there should be Glass instead of that grass.or may be i'm wrong but i didn't get this"broken grass"..please tell me........
and..
"I held my head, and stood my ground"...i think that there should be ''on my ground'.........


Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

The dark story

12 Years Ago

hhhmmmmmmm....you didn't answer my question.please:)
ewest1220

12 Years Ago

Lol sorry about that it was a long night when I added the comment. Broken grass was diffidently int.. read more
The dark story

12 Years Ago

ohohoho.....gotcha
One of my favourites of yours I think. Very powerful and pertinent.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

ewest1220

12 Years Ago

Wow thanks! I'm really glad you liked it!
Okay... Maybe I should stop reading your poems because they are making me so jealous! It's amazing! What inspired this?

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

ewest1220

12 Years Ago

Honestly it's all me. Every feeling and thought that I have is so hard to get out when I speak. Wh.. read more
i felt this poem. it was relate-able and very deep and emotional. great job once again!!! :D

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

ewest1220

12 Years Ago

Thanks! I'm glad you liked it!
Rhea752

12 Years Ago

haha sorry i didn't respond.. i was blogging.
ewest1220

12 Years Ago

No problem :)
Wow, very deep and powerful. I love the end. It says a lot; great job!

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

ewest1220

12 Years Ago

Thanks! I'm glad you enjoyed it!
Admiral Kirk

12 Years Ago

No problem. :D
First stanza, first line: Say should be stay?
Second stanza, third line: it's should be its?
Another powerful poem from you. You really know how to take emotions and thoughts and make the reader feel them too.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

ewest1220

12 Years Ago

Oh ya my brain stalled on this one. It all depends on how it's translated and that's the issue. Fo.. read more
eighwoeifj

12 Years Ago

More like gotta love the English Language. So confusing sometimes.
ewest1220

12 Years Ago

No kidding lol
I find myself empathizing with this noticeably more than I do with other poetry I've read. Fine job.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

ewest1220

12 Years Ago

Thanks! Glad you liked it.
This is lovely. I loved that in the 3rd and 4th stanza your rhyming pattern changes from an abab to an aabb. I love it. Very good.
The self-doubt in this, not about the poem, but about the world that you're living in, is AMAZINGLY felt. Great write, really, it's fantastic.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

ewest1220

12 Years Ago

Wow thanks! I'm really glad you liked it. I would love to hear what you think of my other works if.. read more

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Added on July 17, 2012
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I have been writing for as long as I can remember. I have been featured in about 4 books, have won several contests for my work and currently have a paperback edition of my works. (Titled "A Winter Wa.. more..

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