Doubt

Doubt

By: Ethan West

I say here on this bed tonight

Frozen with a painted fear

That all the beauty of my fight

For life itself that's never near

For wherein my sight my eyes see not

This broken field of grass so still

Where in it's wind blows distant thought

Of my broken battered will

Thoughts of fury and of hate

Of love and beauty incarnate

Thoughts of family and of friends

Crying out to make amends

But in this field I draw a blank

Lonely tears to nourish fate

All these thoughts lay in my wake

My broken spirit lies in wait

For once this man was better found

The battered broken grass did plea

I held my head, and stood my ground

And the field of doubt buried me

Author's Note

Any feedback would be greatly appreciated.

Reviews

[Timeless-Chan]

Do you have any of your work punished? like the poems on here a least? Cause you write all this and all i can think is 1- that im insanily jealous of you because you seem to write so easily and 2- that if it isn't published it should be. I mean what the heck! stop being so good at this lmao!

[ewest1220]

Actually yes I am published here's the link

http://www.amazon.com/A-Winter-Walk-ebook/dp/B008HHYP72/ref=sr_1_1?s=digital-text&ie=UTF8&qid=1341977911&sr=1-1&keywords=ethan+west

But either way I'm really flattered that you feel this way about my work and I'm thrilled that you read it :) Thank you so much for reading!

[Dr. Wood ?]

I think that this is one of your better ones, Sorry I cannot enthuse as others do It may be just me...You have a talent of that there is no doubt. But I am nought but a comic so please don't be put off by anything that I might say...I am sure you won't

[ewest1220]

Praise is nice however I am grateful for any input you have to give my friend! Thanks for reading!

[Rox Bain ☮]

Again, it absoloutly astonishes me how you can write so well... and yet make it seem so natural. I love the lines:
"I held my head, and stood my ground
And the field of doubt buried me"
They're saying so much in so little words...

I have to say... I don't usually go through and read every piece that someone writes... but your writing can hardly be compared to everything else on here... it's amazing :)

[ewest1220]

This is the second time you've made me blush tonight just to let you know XP I'm really thrilled that you enjoy my writing so much and I'm flattered that you hold me in such regard. Thank you so much!

[Rox Bain ☮]

Awwwww, I make you blush c: You're welcome, love ^_^

[Androglossia]

When every choice we make goes ultimately beyond our control, we tend to lose heart when things go against us and drift through life helpless, useless derelicts. And when discouragement strikes, questions start to surface, self esteem starts to blur and doubt starts to eat you up.

The poem simply implies losing faith in oneself. Another great piece!

[ewest1220]

Thanks! I'm really glad you enjoyed it!

[Coyote Poetry]

A very strong poem. I like the tale in the poem. Life make us feel strong or broken over the deeds and actions of a life. This poem had a sad tone to the poem. I like the ending to the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[Pax]

doubt as dark as it is, are well captured here. wonderful job.

[Destinyxi]

I think I accidently deleted my previous comment. Woops.
For wherein my sight my eyes see not >>> where in. Add a space.
Good poem though!

[ewest1220]

lol no problem. But just to let you know wherein is a word as well. It's from an old english phrasing :) I'm really glad you liked my work though thank you so much!

[Destinyxi]

Is it? I learned something new today haha.
You write well, there's nothing to not like :)

[ewest1220]

lol thanks! I'm really glad you liked my work thank you so much for reading!

[Destinyxi]

You're very welcome!

[~Sara~]

I've probably never heard the word 'doubt' be explained to me quite like this! In other words, this was unbelievably great! Keep up the good work! Thanks for sharing!

[ewest1220]

Wow I'm really glad you liked it! Thank you so much for reading!

[Serenity Faith]

I doubt I've read any better image on doubt than you have written here ^_^ Very nicely done and many understand.

[ewest1220]

Wow :) Thanks for reading I'm really glad you liked it!

[T. Logan]

Broken spirit- probably my favorite word pair in there. It's a depressing kind of poem, which is good, because a lot of people can relate to that.

[ewest1220]

Thanks! I'm glad you liked it!