The Grace of the Gifted

The Grace of the Gifted

By: Ethan West

What beauty lies within my mind?

In which my heart is all but vague

What precious perils are benign

And why was love I killed now saved?

She came across me as I worked

My mind on anything but love

She saw my value, knew my worth

And brought me heaven like a dove

And now my restless soul does rest

It lies awake in turmoil's sleep

For my old wound bound heart to breast

Within her eyes so dark and deep

And as a tear fell from her eye

My heart lay bare in my own face

I held within a stifled sigh

And now I want to fill the space

Can you allow me this one grace?

That I may now beside you lay

To see the beauty of this place

And in your heart, forever stay

Author's Note

Any feedback is greatly appreciated thank you!

Reviews

[Androglossia]

We all do tend to go through what you described as transition or where we cross that bridge from getting hurt and having been living the shadow of the same person for so long to the idea of caring for someone else. I am a huge believer in love and know that it can happen for those who really want it.

The character seems to be someone who is ready to look for the next person who could bring a healthy heart into his life. You succeeded in creating an impression of effectiveness. Good job!

[ewest1220]

Once again a great review from you I'm thrilled that you liked this piece!

[Pax]

sweet and romantic.

[ewest1220]

Thanks!

[Thomas Reilly Thornhill]

The fluency is fantastic except from in stanza two, line two but other than that it's my favourite from you :D

[ewest1220]

Awesome! I'm really thrilled you like this one! Thanks again for reading!

[Rox Bain ☮]

This is a really beautiful poem...
The line that struck me was: "And why was love I killed now saved?" For some reason, I found this line very satisfying to read. Again, I love the rhyming scheme and the imagery is brilliant.

[ewest1220]

Thanks! I'm really glad you liked it!

[Sarah Hitchcock]

I am in no way an expert, but I liked this poem. It was well written and a pleasure to read. I liked the flow and pace of this poem. I am sorry this is not a in more depth review, but poems are not my strong point. Writing or reviewing.

Sarah.

[ewest1220]

Either way I'm truly glad you enjoyed it. Thanks for reading!

[Sarah Hitchcock]

You are more than welcome.

[Hatchling]

I like it

[ewest1220]

Thanks!

[Hatchling]

Your welcome

[Nontani]

Love is strange. But it's so beautiful. I really like this. It has a sense of empathy, reality. It captures how surreal relationships may seem but hints at the reality of the struggles. Nice work. (:

[ewest1220]

Thanks! I'm really glad you liked it!

[Justin Flume]

Dude. You. Are. Amazing.


100/100

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[ewest1220]

Thanks!

[~Sara~]

The person who you are describing in this poem seems to be looking for a new beginning. We all go through a time or two when the person who is closest to our heart seems to be the one breaking it. People get pushed away from love and don't know where to turn, but sometimes it calls for a new beginning. This was another great poem and I greatly appreciate you sharing it! Thank you!

[ewest1220]

And I appreciate you giving your feedback on it! Thank you so much for reading your reviews are always insightful!

[T. Logan]

I really like this! It kind of explains how love just shows up sometimes. We can't go looking for it, and we can't ignore it either. It just happens.

[ewest1220]

It really does doesn't it lol I'm really glad you liked my piece. Thank you for reading!