"The Elusive bat"

Fast strikes during the night can warrant any fight

Moving through the night

Never hesitant to take flight

I found a tree to my liking

while I planned my next striking

The Urge to feast was strong

as I waited for prey to come along

The small mouse would make a good meal

so I chose to make my thoughts real

Though my catch was with its mother

the circle of life remains vicious like no other

As I snatched the pest

its mother challenged me with her best

Though she failed, she survived

and the life of her young was soon deprived

The elusive bat feeds once again

as it returns to its comfortable den

Reviews

[R.E. Ray]

Another good work from you, Corey. Literally and metaphorically, an impressive poem. You certainly paint vivid images and create an emotional state consistent with what we know as the "circle of life" and "survival of the fittest." Of course, when this violence plays out among humans, it's the purest form of evil.

[Just Kim]

I enjoyed this write a lot, love the flow and rhyme scheme. awesome

[Great Aunt Astri]

Wonderful! How clever to use the voice of the bat, and to show the ruthfulness of life as a mere part of the circle of life. The mother survives and the bat is content. I love the format, good rhythm and rhymes which are nor forced. I enjoyed this poem.