I Will Pray For You

Dedication for all

I Will Pray For You

If you feel alone
Or deep underground
Just whisper me all
I will pray for you

If someone scolds you hard
Or you are feeling low
Just look around I am there and
I will pray for you

If you suffer a fever
Or even just a flu
Then just tell me and
I will pray for you

If a sin has been done by you
And it sticks like glue
Then just say it all and
I will pray for you

If someone close has died
Or another family issue
As soon as I find out
I will pray for you

If you got into trouble
Or a toughest part can't handle
Then,  with all my heart
I will pray for you

If you had a fight
Or if you are in misery
Then, again I will be there and
I will pray for the best

I hope one day when I am down
Or simply feeling blue
You will pray for me too
Just like I prayed for you

Because sometime, somewhere
I also need a prayer

~AK~

© Eve Ola

Reviews

[Christopher Robin]

Well points for meter, however, your rhyming falls in and out which makes the writing feel clumsy and in turn makes it harder to connect to. With perfect b/d couplets people won't get distracted by the inconsistencies and will be able to enjoy the poem all the more. Also I feel there may be an error with your line "Or feeling like a miserable". Miserable is an adjective not a noun so not sure exactly what you intended here but perhaps this is just a first draft?
Now, silly syntax and grammar out of the way, the poem itself is quite nicely delivered, it has a consistent (if overbearing) theme of prayer, yet here also I find an issue...how can i describe this, I feel as though your poem calls for healing, but it delivers prayer, which is hope, not healing. That being said i understand the healing power of faith, but there lies a confusion in your poem in the distinction between 'praying for someone' and 'praying for someone's situation to improve'. Perhaps I'm being ignorant and it is simply implied but I found this (what I imagine to be a pertinent point) unclear. I believe there's greatness in here, both with the theme and delivery, but it feels obscured by the aforementioned disjointedness. Good luck with your future work, I'm always happy to discuss/help with anything you like :)

[Eve Ola]

Well thank you so much for such feedback I really appreciate.
You point out the Miserable as adjective, that’s my mistake and updated now. For grammar issue, English is not my first language so, sorry for that but I learn through my mistakes. This is about Prayer for all not a hope or healing but it’s like whatever bad happens I will pray for them.. And for rhyming, that poem is just written with prayer flow. For me this flow seems better than following rhyming.
Thanks again and yeah your feedback will be helpful for future writes. Do visit my more work so I can amend and learn for future writes. Thank You :)

[Christopher Robin]

You're most welcome, and I must say if english is not your first language then this is even more impressive and I will try not to be so harsh on the technical and grammar side of things, it's far better than anything I could attempt in another language :)

[Eve Ola]

thanks Robin nice meeting u:)

[anne]

so sweet but filled with emotions at same time.. :)

[Eve Ola]

Thank you :)

[stars are far]

I hope everything will be okay with you, and we all need prayer since without it, we will e drawning, i will pray for you my dear friend, i will :)

[Eve Ola]

aww sweet Thank you dear