Cold morning with foggy way
As moving in this blurry way
Calmness exists through my way
I stopped my journey for this play
Want to feel this foggy cold
With autumny effect sides behold
Crispy leaves laying down
Roasted leaves falling down
Surrounded by flowery valley Colorful petals with amazing gallery
Moving my nose close to layers
Smelling them like nature players
Looking around with profound
With stealing thought seeing around
I want to pluck this Red Rose, because
I always dreams in my thoughts
Passing time with flowery surrounding
Falling droplets at this grounding
I screamed, Its Rain Rain
Lifting my face up and refrained
Rain dip dips on my face
Wetty feet and grassy place
With red rose in my hands
I want to pause with longer stand
Bare foots on grassy land
Dipping soaking as I be Quickly moving under the tree
Pulling bushes for more rainy gee
Oh Dear moment!
I always want you through my way
Will you stay long, for this day?
Great imagery as well as description of the other senses as well in here. I love when smell is brought into poetry, it exercises the brain and makes you imagine more.
"I always want you through my way
Will you stay long, for this day?"
I loved the artwork and the poem. Nature is my favorite place.Color of Nature allow us to know color and true beauty. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote
I love the scenic charms of nature.. you have painted a nice picture of the rain ,red rose and the autumn leaves.. nice write.work more with your rhyming scheme and yea improve your vocabulary.. ★ takecare★
At times it takes me by surprise some of us can't write prose to save our lives even when trying. Some of us want to write poetry because it allows the concept behind to roam free from the contructs of linear sequence. So why would then? Blurry way seem to want to find another way again when there was a way there to begin with? Two sameness cannot coexsist in space and time (so would physics recommend) so the use of same words in a repetitive "way" must assume intentionality and it causes break when reading. The most mysterious of things is that you seem to have conciously decided to use that within the context of freeing but it came to me as an encarceration of sorts. And as I edit this to satisfy all manners of ammusing emotions I hope my stupidity is not taken as an insult but rather as light humour.
Thankyou for your invite!
Posted 10 Years Ago
10 Years Ago
you didnt get it true. blurry way is a foggy way when things seems so blurry.. anyway i wrote what I.. read moreyou didnt get it true. blurry way is a foggy way when things seems so blurry.. anyway i wrote what I feel and capture the moment. Thanks for stopping by.
10 Years Ago
I know this is none of my business, but dude, you high on what? Opium?
10 Years Ago
I assume that is becuase of my comment not only or nerdyness happy to explain but I don't think ther.. read moreI assume that is becuase of my comment not only or nerdyness happy to explain but I don't think there is any need. And also to emphasize that if I am sent a request to read I will and express myself otherwise there is no need for the request right? If what follows this is the desire to insult me based upon my comment I am quite happy to remove it. Bearing that in mind do you need to get high to be creative?
10 Years Ago
Nah man, you're phrasing is just utterly chaotic, and it's really hard to navigate through... whatev.. read moreNah man, you're phrasing is just utterly chaotic, and it's really hard to navigate through... whatever you're trying to convey. Also, it's "because" not "becuase". Making a spelling mistake is fine, twice in a row... definitely not.
10 Years Ago
I agree in both accounts yet how did you equate that to "being high" ? Rather than intentional chaos.. read moreI agree in both accounts yet how did you equate that to "being high" ? Rather than intentional chaos? I get the impression that you have invested feelings as I said happy to delete if it will contribute to make your day any better albeit in a chaotic way.
10 Years Ago
I think it is just logical that when one writes in such a nonsensical way, one must either have a ve.. read moreI think it is just logical that when one writes in such a nonsensical way, one must either have a very mfeeble grasp on the English language, or shitfaced high. No need to delete anything, be on your merry.
10 Years Ago
Option 1 then feeeble grasp and yes always a pleasure
guys keep going the way you like. I accept your criticism for my work so I improve in my other write.. read moreguys keep going the way you like. I accept your criticism for my work so I improve in my other writes. English is not my first language so a lot grammatical mistakes..
10 Years Ago
*feeble, goddammit
English isn't my native language either.
10 Years Ago
Sorry mate I promise this is the last you will get see or hear from me. You need to admit that there.. read moreSorry mate I promise this is the last you will get see or hear from me. You need to admit that there aspects of humour within this typo filled lines. Please do take care.