Magical Piece- Soul-mate

Magical Piece- Soul-mate

I remember the day
When I pinched by this pure feeling,
A feeling we called
A Pure Love, A Pure Relation..

Remember, your 1st dedication?
I just forwarded to my friend,
When She played,Jealousy moves all around
By the thought,
Why? Why i did this?
This song is just for me
Then I actually realized & pinched
By love kinda feeling for you..

Terrible network & Waiting hours
Routine torture & deadly distance
Tears, Smiles & Imaginary support
I always praise that I am the lucky one
By having a master piece in shape of You..

You always hide my flaws n faults
You always cover my lies n tears
You are the one i openly say, everything in all
You took me for visit around, while we are on, on call
That ice cream, pani puri n chocolate
I never forget that all..

Craziest love made me mad
A part from this we are best friends too
Where we fought like angry birds
But like always, angry birds flew soon
We are passing through all this,
With every passing time n hour
We are more in to this stronger bond

In the end, i would say
You are my entire world
Where smile exists just for you
I promise you to give u true
All my Love Happiness & Life
Where i will treat U like new born
So soft so gentle n so cute
You are the one i ever want

~AK~

© Eve Ola

Reviews

[Penny]

Indeed, love grows better when it is put to a test, specially that of seperation or distance. You reminded of some precious moments of my own life like that of eating ice cream which is cute and I think solves the purpose of such writings. Sweet and lovable, keep writing like this.

[Eve Ola]

thanks Penny for such a lovely feedback. I really appreciate your words :)

[Penny]

And i really appreciate your writing. Pleasure

[Ayushi]

A magical love tale you have depicted through this one.
Enjoyable read :)

[Eve Ola]

Thanks for the read Ayushi :)

[stars are far]

That is very sweet, i already said about love, hehe, that is very amazing, and love does inspire us to be writers, once i was reading a book, and arabic book, and it said, "dont tell me that you dont know how to write, write for me, when we love we are all poets inside" yeah i guess thats it..
its amazing.. well done :)

[Eve Ola]

Exactly.... when we love we are all poets inside!! Thanks a lot dear:)

[stars are far]

also plato says that "at the touch of love everyone becomes a poet" hehe i just remembred his qoutation, stay in love dear, best wishes :)

[Eve Ola]

thanks dear :)

[Coyote Poetry]

"In the end, i would say
You are my entire world
Where smile exists just for you"
I like the story ad the positive feel of the poem. Love should make us know madness. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Eve Ola]

and thank you for giving a kind feedback :)

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome.

[Edward Lancheister]

good poem, my suggestion "You always hide my flaws n faults
You always cover my lies n tears
You are the one i openly say, everything in all
You took me for visit around, while we are on, on call
That ice cream, pani puri n chocolate
I never forget that all.. could be more simple like this

You always hide my flaws and faults between cover my lies and tears
You are the one I openly say, everything in all
generosity to look after, shared ice cream, pani Puri n chocolate
A moment that will never be forgotten

[Eve Ola]

I want to rewrite few verses but not able to adjust perfect words. your suggestions is much appreciated I do consider. Thanks a lot :)