Sleeping Beauty - My Love

Sleeping Beauty - My Love

Sleeping beauty in front of my eyes..
Sprinkled hairs over there..
Gently touched,
To clear your forehead..
and kissing you,
by keeping my eyes closed..
Oh! Look at your eyes..
Deep insight, lost in dreams..
I gently pushed UP myself..
and touched your eyes, by my lips..
Suddenly, you breath
and a look to your nose..
cuddling your nose by mine,
smiles n thinks that
He is mine & my Life..

~AK~


© Eve Ola

Reviews

[Luissanto]

Incredibly romantic and charming. The love and tenderness, you describe
is quite... dare I say "enchanting." Beautifully written.

[Eve Ola]

your words push me to write more. so encouraging.. Thank you:)

[Kurayami]

This is a very nice short poem of sleeping beauty. If I were to chose a poem to describe sleeping beauty then it will be this poem.

~Kurayami

[Eve Ola]

So glad that u choose this one :) Thanks a lot

[Matching Socks]

Awwww, this makes me giggle it's so cute and affectionate the moment you've captured. :)

[Eve Ola]

Thanks Ance for such sweet review :)

[Coyote Poetry]

Nice flow of thoughts leading to the very good ending. Beauty is in the eyes of the beholder. I perfect ending to the poem. Thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[Eve Ola]

Thanks Coyote for praising my work :) and thanks for being around

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome. It is my pleasure.

[J. K. Beach]

This is a fine write about a touching moment! It has a beautiful feel to it. Two quick notes... One, 'you breath' might be 'you breathe' And two, a reminder that cutting words short (like n for and) can interrupt the rhythm of a line by making the reader think just a little too much, especially if they are older. The 'n' also has no sound and poetry is nothing if not about sound. If you do need to shorten for meter (a time honored poetic device), you might use words that can be truncated with an apostrophe (like 'til for until), but try to avoid the shortcuts often used in texting... :)

[Eve Ola]

Thanks JKB I followed the rules you said. I forget here as its my older write. Thanks for the words and I will amend here too :)

[J. K. Beach]

It's just a little-bitty thing, really... You are doing just fine!

[anne]

though I won't be able to say much but one is so lucky who has got such a wonderful partner......

[Eve Ola]

Thanks Anne :)

[Avinash]

Hope he knows that we all are reading this ..lol ;)..he is a lucky guy anyway

[Eve Ola]

Nopes I didnt shared with him ;) Thanks for stopping by :)

[Writer at last! Sky ~]

Wow delighted to read this wonderful.......

[Eve Ola]

thanks a lot :)

[KWP]

ahh to be enveloped by the moment
what a magical place to hang out
I feel the strength of your love
so admirable

x x

[Eve Ola]

Thanks for the feel :)