Tell Me

Just don't tell me what you think I want to hear

Tell me something about what you see when you look in my eyes

Tell me how it feels when you make me cry

Tell me what you see when you look deep inside

Tell me what you feel when you know about the pain I try to hide..tell me

Tell me what your heart does when I am near

Tell me what your body feels when I wipe away your tears

Tell me how your heart breaks when you know I can't stay

Tell me why I see tears fall when I start to walk away...tell me

I want to know how it feels

I want to know how it hurts

 

Reviews

[Tate Morgan]

Beautiful
tate

[bluessadmood]

God how lovely this is..what lovely feelings ..so tell me how you feel ..
Tell me what you see when look in to my eyes..how it feels when you make me cry
What you see if look deep inside of me..the pain I hide..tell me
Tell me what it feels when i wipe away the tears
tell me how your heart breaks when I cant stay
Why i see tears fall when i start to walk..tell me
I want to know how it feels ,want to know how it hurts
what a lovely write..how i enjoyed it
lovely write..

[Randal Bright]

This is a most wonderful poem you have here. I feel the emotion you are portraying with this. It's not enough to get "what I want to hear" or to be told something for the sake of telling it to them. A guy should be able to at least somehow... express how he feels around someone he loves... or... cares about. At least, that's what a guy should do for a women.

[kiki756]

Lovely.

[M. Amphet Salt]

The First line lacks an adverb or need to be rewritten.
Tell me something about when you look in my eyes/ Tell me about something Good, bad, truthful

This line, "Tell me what you body" the you needs an r for possession.

"when you know I cant stay" Apostrophy missing in can't

Good Write.