Little Desire

Something from my teen angst years... it's how I like to think of it.

anger
jealousy
a clustering hate

watching
deceiving
a possible fate

glowering
envying
cannot sedate

hurting
wanting
don't throw it away

grasping
gasping
cannot keep

disappearing
gone
just weep

Reviews

[hiralarious]

This was really good(:
You did a great job.. I really like the structure, as Silvario said(:
Great poem :]

[Silvario]

Powerful. I really like this structure. For me, the more emotion you invoke from a reader, the better the write. You accomplished this using few, but well written words. Nice work. :)

[theperfectfit]

Even though you did not elaborate and used a collection of very powerful words you were still able to convey the despearate struggle to want and keep something that you can never have. well done.