Cicada 8:33

Yellow crashes against this

Window, shining light

On my sickly white walls.

 

The weighty anvil descends on me

And traps my fevered body as

Its iron cools and crushes my whimpering bones.

 

This is my afterlife, immortal but immobile.

I desire nothing more than a cracked rib

And snacks now and then.

 

But I wish the insects would leave me be.

They circle my bed like chanting savages,

Flashing their fangs and beating winged drums.

 

Their nauseous hum seeps inside my thoughts

As I shake my vomit-filled head,

Desperate to escape.

 

Bleeding ears and burning body

Remind me of demons past,

Scraping their way up my throat.

 

I am but a humbly pure shell,

Nothing more, perhaps less,

Sentenced to sleep in an oven.

Author's Note

Reviews would be appreciated :)

Reviews

[T.S. Sky]

Very interesting. I can relate to this piece.

[Alessander]

This is brimming with details and energy, even if somewhat macabre and neurotic

But I wish the insects would leave me be.

They circle my bed like chanting savages,

Flashing their fangs and beating winged drums.

Kinda reminds me of Kafka. And nice finish

"Sentenced to sleep in an oven."

Nice allusion to Plath.

[Taylor]

ah, guess who's back? i like it.

[Emily]

Vivid piece that made it seem so real, as if I was there!

[pia]

brilliant poem. written beautifully to give out a haunting feel.

[Ethan]

Thank you very much

[barleygirl]

Upon first read, I saw this as a description of how it might feel inside one's casket, rotting away & being munched on by bugs . . . a very brilliant point of view in its originality. But this can also apply to a wide variety of things, such as creepy thoughts you can't rid yourself of, etc. I am in the mood for some macabre writing, with Halloween coming . . . thanks for greasing my imagination!

[Ethan]

Haha no problem :) And thank you for your review

[Alex Ware]

This is extremely vivid and hauntingly written, good stuff

[Ethan]

Thanks :)))

[Jddcbjiuh]

:'0 you wrote this so well ! Can't say how much I love it, because I can relate so much and this poetry accurately matched how I've felt. Bravo. Also yes it is very vivid, nice style ^.^ lol~

[Ethan]

Aw thank you :)

[Sam]

I really liked the description, and the way you portrayed your thoughts!

[Ethan]

Thanks!! :)

[Barbara Walker]

Not an afterlife I would like to have! Very descriptive!

[Ethan]

Haha m neither. Thank you :)