Goodnight

My first haiku...

Stars have been turned off.

The night sky is cold and black.

God must be sleeping.

Reviews

[L.C. Jarrette]

nice haiku there ethan. since haiku is short, some may think it's pretty easy to compose, well i'm not sure about that...how you have to compress everything into a 17 syllable poem and convey the message through implication and expression of allusion . a poem written in this form is very difficult for me. good job!

[Ethan]

Thanks you!

[Katseye]

short and sweet, made me smile.

[Ethan]

Thanks again :)

[Priyanshi]

Good try, Ethan...Keep it up.

[Ethan]

Thanks :))

[Phill Oz O'fee]

The origins of haiku can be traced back as far as the 9th century. Haiku is more than a type of poem; it is a way of looking at the physical world and seeing something deeper, like the very nature of existence. And, for a first attempt - you nailed it ... well penned!

[Ethan]

Thank you Phil

[MaximumFlight]

Very interesting and ironically dark.

[Ethan]

Thank you very much

[YouoweYoupay]

I like this and I especially appreciate the hope you left even when the stars have been turned off. God has not abandoned us, he is just resting his eyes. But he is still here.

Nice work. Keep writing please.

~Rain.

[Ethan]

Thanks again :)

[Decidious wind]

I have never tried haiku before but i love the ending on an ambigious note. It sounds like something scary or bad is about to happen because God never sleeps. So if he slept then it means existence has no protector. Im sorry but i just found this poem way too beautiful and way too meaningful although it is very short

[Ethan]

Thank you so much. Nice username btw

[Decidious wind]

Thanks ;) hahah

[Chris]

a thought-full fusion,
of a mind's eyes view about
our NOW and the why.

[Ethan]

Whoa dude I didn't even notice this earlier. Reviewing haikus with haikus is next level

[Chris]

Just letting you know your effort was understood AND led to further consideration.

[Anthony (aka Mr.e)]

Nicely done Ethan! Nothing like a deep haiku to get the gears turnin'...

[Ethan]

Very true, thank you Mr.e

[Hope]

A good haiku Ethan:)
And so cute indeed.
Thanks for sharing!

[Ethan]

Haha thanks Neetha

[Hope]

My pleasure:)