A Lover's Gaze

A Lover's Gaze

A Poem by Ethan

Would you stay here with me if I did so ask?

Am I certain that I wish to hear you say?

I, for one, can see the devil, lover-masked,

Staring blankly in my eyes this very day.

© 2019 Ethan


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The beauty of this is that it's short and sweet, but it doesn't need explanation. It tells you details, and the rest is left for your mind to consider. Poetry, to me, has a personal tie that cannot be broken. This piece makes me consider the past. Sure, it could be a reach, but I find the more a piece makes me consider myself - my history - the better the writing. It's a great work, Ethan. Nicely done.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ethan

7 Years Ago

Thank you very much :)
Hosimone

7 Years Ago

I agree with you, BThomvan. I find that, if I write something that is connected to me, I write a lot.. read more



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This poem has so much in itself. Not a direct approch of what you wanted to say but managed to do that in a nice way. I liked the comparison here. Good job.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ethan

7 Years Ago

Thank you Najam
Najam Us Saher

7 Years Ago

You are most welcome :)
Short but very powerful
"I, for one, can see the devil, lover-masked,
Staring blankly in my eyes this very day."

This part gave me the chills, I loved it and loved this piece as a whole.

Thank you for sharing.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Ethan

7 Years Ago

Thanks Joey
Joey Nizz

7 Years Ago

Your welcome buddy
oh the insincerity that abounds in lack of commitment and the blindness of unrequited love. You certainly like the sonnet type of romance Ethan.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ethan

7 Years Ago

Yes, I believe it's growing on me :P Thank you
Meter is not something I work with. For some strange reason, I can't wrap my head around it lol Nonetheless, that aside, the first two lines of this piece leaves me shaking my head as I think it's something we all have thought or asked at one time or another. The next two lines put a creepy twist on it and I do like that! Much enjoyed this piece.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ethan

7 Years Ago

It's incredibly rewarding to learn. I'm honing my forms now so that when I return to free verse (my .. read more
Luna Eclipse

7 Years Ago

You are most welcome. I am a die hard free verse fan myself. Forms although beautiful, I find are ve.. read more
Ethan

7 Years Ago

Thank you :)
(cringing noise).....awesome!! Perfect!! Short and eerie and profound!! I'm pretty sure the hyphen is supposed to go in between "devil" and "lover" though.....not "lover" and "masked". Yet all in all, in every aspect of its being, well done!!

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

emipoemi

7 Years Ago

never mind....I just saw I had read that sentence wrong.
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Ethan

7 Years Ago

Oh okay, well thank you very much :)
Ooh! It's really interesting!!!
The first line hooked me and made me want to read more :)
Keep it up Ethan :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ethan

7 Years Ago

Many thanks :)))
Mr.Writer

7 Years Ago

No problem :)

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