The beauty of this is that it's short and sweet, but it doesn't need explanation. It tells you details, and the rest is left for your mind to consider. Poetry, to me, has a personal tie that cannot be broken. This piece makes me consider the past. Sure, it could be a reach, but I find the more a piece makes me consider myself - my history - the better the writing. It's a great work, Ethan. Nicely done.
Posted 7 Years Ago
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7 Years Ago
Thank you very much :)
7 Years Ago
I agree with you, BThomvan. I find that, if I write something that is connected to me, I write a lot.. read moreI agree with you, BThomvan. I find that, if I write something that is connected to me, I write a lot better than something that I have never experienced before.
This poem has so much in itself. Not a direct approch of what you wanted to say but managed to do that in a nice way. I liked the comparison here. Good job.
Meter is not something I work with. For some strange reason, I can't wrap my head around it lol Nonetheless, that aside, the first two lines of this piece leaves me shaking my head as I think it's something we all have thought or asked at one time or another. The next two lines put a creepy twist on it and I do like that! Much enjoyed this piece.
It's incredibly rewarding to learn. I'm honing my forms now so that when I return to free verse (my .. read moreIt's incredibly rewarding to learn. I'm honing my forms now so that when I return to free verse (my first love), I will be able to write in a more organized fashion. Thanks for your review.
7 Years Ago
You are most welcome. I am a die hard free verse fan myself. Forms although beautiful, I find are ve.. read moreYou are most welcome. I am a die hard free verse fan myself. Forms although beautiful, I find are very difficult for me. I love metaphors and find free verse allows me much more freedom in my expression and use of them. I wish you much luck honing your skills. I think you have a great start going!
(cringing noise).....awesome!! Perfect!! Short and eerie and profound!! I'm pretty sure the hyphen is supposed to go in between "devil" and "lover" though.....not "lover" and "masked". Yet all in all, in every aspect of its being, well done!!