A Lover's Gaze

Would you stay here with me if I did so ask?

Am I certain that I wish to hear you say?

I, for one, can see the devil, lover-masked,

Staring blankly in my eyes this very day.

Reviews

[BThomvanWart]

The beauty of this is that it's short and sweet, but it doesn't need explanation. It tells you details, and the rest is left for your mind to consider. Poetry, to me, has a personal tie that cannot be broken. This piece makes me consider the past. Sure, it could be a reach, but I find the more a piece makes me consider myself - my history - the better the writing. It's a great work, Ethan. Nicely done.

[Ethan]

Thank you very much :)

[Hosimone]

I agree with you, BThomvan. I find that, if I write something that is connected to me, I write a lot better than something that I have never experienced before.

[CMC]

I wish I knew how to use Meter and write forms of poetry, but that is something I have yet to learn. On a different note, this is wonderfully written. I like most how you used the description of a devil in the mask of a lover to express some kind of fear or desire being drawn out by a lover's gaze (or at least that was how I interpreted it).

[Ethan]

Thanks as always Chris

[CMC]

Hey. I just have a quick question. Why is this poem tagged as a villanelle?

[Ethan]

I'm not sure, I think I had originally written a villanelle, left it unpublished, scrapped most of it, and then forgot to take the tag off? I've only ever written one villanelle, so I don't know why this is tagged. I changed it, thanks.

[CMC]

You're welcome. You could take it on as a challenge to rewrite that Villanelle that you scrapped. I think that would be pretty interesting.

[Hope]

Short but good with a twist.
Enjoyed this;)

[Ethan]

Well Im glad you enjoyed it ;)

[Hope]

Pleasure, Always:)

[Priyanshi]

You wrote another good poem...short but enough to portray what you wanna say...and I did enjoy it.

[Ethan]

Thank you!

[Anjali]

Now this is called a short but a very deep and meaningful poem! I simply adored it's simplicity and also it's deepness. This poem doesn't need any more words cuz it's powerful even without a lot of words. Keep writing!

[Ethan]

Thank you Anjali :))

[Anjali]

Mention not!

[Raven Moonchild]

DUDE!!!! Short, deep, enticing, and abso-freaking-lutely fantastic!!!! :D Ethan, this is amazing, man. It sent shivers down my spine.

[Ethan]

I hate shivers down my spine xD but thank you

[Vasilees Sybissyl]

I love how the first lines are normal conversation like, and then the last ones add this new creepiness and eeriness to the poem. This is an intriguing poem you've got here, sir.

Love,
Vasilees.

[Ethan]

Thank you :)))

[Bala Gorthi]

Eerie and intriguing for me but, nonetheless it is beautiful. Loved this pice, Ethan. Thank you for sharing..

[Ethan]

Thank you very much

[Sofia]

I didn't quite get the last two lines​...but still, it must be very good..since everyone's praising it..keep writing :)

[Ethan]

Haha would you like them explained. And thanks for the review as always

[Sofia]

Yeah sure! A little bit of knowledge a day never hurts... it's always a pleasure reading your works :)

[Ethan]

He asks if he's sure he wants to know what his lover will say because he thinks she might be the devil, disguised as the woman he loves. But at the same time, he still loves her

[Sofia]

Ohh! I got it :)

[wordman]

the power of love,or the lack of

[Ethan]

Indeed. Wise words from a wise wordman. Thank you