The beauty of this is that it's short and sweet, but it doesn't need explanation. It tells you details, and the rest is left for your mind to consider. Poetry, to me, has a personal tie that cannot be broken. This piece makes me consider the past. Sure, it could be a reach, but I find the more a piece makes me consider myself - my history - the better the writing. It's a great work, Ethan. Nicely done.
Posted 7 Years Ago
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7 Years Ago
Thank you very much :)
7 Years Ago
I agree with you, BThomvan. I find that, if I write something that is connected to me, I write a lot.. read moreI agree with you, BThomvan. I find that, if I write something that is connected to me, I write a lot better than something that I have never experienced before.
You're right, "here" is just there so I could keep six foots of meter. What would you suggest I do?
7 Years Ago
I dunno. In looking at it, what does "did so" do that "If I asked," doesn't say? Yes, you need it fo.. read moreI dunno. In looking at it, what does "did so" do that "If I asked," doesn't say? Yes, you need it for prosidy reasons, but the line seems to have problems, including why someone asks if a person they say is evil two lines later, will stay?