Nugatory

As shadow flees the burning sun, I escape my heart's captor, carrying my core through a dark, gloomy cave; my sewer of a soul, searching for any glimmering optimism that may remain in such thickly overwhelming black mud.

 

Finding nothing, I turn toward the empty expanse of my marshy mind, finally understanding the beauty in sinking, peacefully passing inside my boring, boundless brain. Better to be bored than bruised, I say.

 

Anyway, sloshing to the center, the dull pool of discarded juices filled with monochrome ideas and dreams splash my weakening knees. To my dismay, dipping the dripping red heart in the liquid drenched with the stench of neutrally narcotic nutrients, the sickening solution has not the healing properties required to stanch the wholesome hole suffered by my organ.

 

Relinquishing every inkling of hope left in my conscious, I limp towards freedom, flinging my crux into an amorous, blissful abyss, completing my call as quickly as heavy objects fall. Purgatory is nugatory everyone knows. Only by capitulation can the future flow.

 

 

Author's Note

Reviews would be greatly appreciated :)

Reviews

[Tabby Mac]

As much as I love your work...my simple mind got lost a few times. I really liked it once I got through it. But I felt like I had to be smart to read this.
I love your creativity and the imagery I did understand was AMAZING! It wants the poem I think it was me that fell short this time!
Tabby

[Ethan]

Thank you :) This was the second poem I've ever written. Needless to say, I wasn't very good at focusing on one point.

[Carol Cashes]

Tabby, I love that you jus' throw it out there..."er...uh...say what?" *laughing*. I used to think I was a smarty pants until I joined this site! You make me laugh and inspire great respect for you at the same time. You. Try.

[Tabby Mac]

I'll say it Ethan...you are super smart!! I and I'm grateful for you!
Tabby

[Ethan]

Aw thank you. I'm grateful for you as well :))

[barleygirl]

I love being turned on to new words & your title sent me to google -- excellent word choice! I find some people write about this feeling of nothingness, but it ends up being flat & lifeless. In this case, you've taken the idea to new heights & intensity. Your descriptions are heavily laced with gory sensations & good word sounds & combinations such as alliteration. This is the poster child for making art out of misery (((HUGS)))

[Carol Cashes]

"Gloomy caves, sewer souls...I like dark, but this made me run for my Prozac. Your previous pieces I've read were impressive and this is too. Can't pretend to critique, it's waaay outta my league, but I know a good turn of phrase and this delivers quite a few.

[Ethan]

Hahahahaha I kinda wanna steal your Prozac line. That's gold xD But thank you very much for the review

[mattavelli]

Hello, Ethan! :)
This was an interesting read, a fun trip into your mind.
I enjoyed the thoughtfulness, but some of the alliteration was distracting.

[wordman]

a journey into the mind,as a volcano of emotions erupt

[Hosimone]

You have an amazing vocabulary, Ethan. Embarrassingly, I had to look a few words up. Anyway, nice imagery and use of words. I like how you write.

[Ethan]

Thank you!

[Gaurav]

Nice usage of words..lot to learn from inventive stanzas.

[Alexzandera]

Refreshing not to see the short-lined stanzas! (says the girl who writes exactly that)

[Ethan]

Haha thank you

[Anjali]

It's very well penned, I really liked the theme of this piece. Keep writing!

[Farhan Shaikh]

Loved the entire poem, enjoyed while reading and the start was better..thanks for sharing friend..