To Take You From Your Sleeping Ways

They stood behind their marching drums
And, boy, did they have fun
Knocking on your door again
To take you from your sleeping ways

They persuade you to
exagerate a memory or two
And listen to you speak
About how you held the world on a string

Yeah, we're all feeling so good
There are feathers everywhere
But that's the best part
Along side the sweet singing in new voices

And you awake from sleeping in the rain
And smile at the thought of the ones
Who came and saved you from
Your life that was going to waste

Author's Note

Sugar cane in the easy morning.
Mr.Moon can you please forget to fall down?

Reviews

[Meredith Leigh]

I liked the whole feel and atmosphere of this poem.
I don't know what it is about it, but for some strange reason it made me feel almost powerful.
Great work!

- Kriss

[Loribeth215]

Very good... I loved the title, the rythm, and the whole theme.

[Sharon Miller Bolander]

I've never liked getting out of bed even though I'm good-to-go once I'm up. Intended or not, your poem reminded me of how I feel when the alarm (drums) goes off and it's time to rise and shine from my dreams (sleeping in the rain). I really enjoyed your poem and hope I'm not too far off in its interpretation. :-) Sharon

[An owl on the moon]

Such a soft, moving work of varied colors reminiscent of abstract memories and falling leaves... Beautiful in every possible way!

Craig

[EVERYTHINGyoucantelltoS..]

i love. the last stanza especially. ties it all up in a pretty ribbon for me. and the coloring/format is really interesting too. makes it moreso worth a reread.

[Teni]

wow... i think it was very ABSTRACT! and i'm kinda lost too :S u'll have to explain it too me sometime. PCE!

[Alaina]

Heyy,, i Love this poem! your writting is so inspiring also thanx for getting me onto this geat site im not that great of a writer but its a good time to start i also really love your paragraph structure, lol i need to fix mine!

[Dr. S. D. Blankenship D..]

Very intreging I love the flow, the read was very good, you most have spent a long time working on this one.

"Yeah, we're all feeling so good
There are feathers everywhere
But that's the best part
Along side the sweet singing in new voices"

Loved it, reminds me of my poem " I see you in my dreams"


Waya adisi

[Oddpoet]

Really liked the concept of this piece.
Isn't it the truth> Sometimes I think we all need a wake up call.

"And you awake from sleeping in the rain
And smile at the thought of the ones
Who came and saved you from
Your life that was going to waste"

Wonderful write!
By the way, if a telephone rings in your stomach do not pick it up!
That whole "Alien" movie comes to mind.

Great job!