Friends?

Lets be friends.

Lets put it all behind us.

 

We can pretend it never happened.

 

I can lie to myself. Can you?

We can save those memories,

Let them coax(?) us to sleep every night.

 

For these are not day time thoughts.

I need never think of how you made me feel.

Never again.

Never again should my thoughts of our happenings in darkness

see the light of day.

 

Now we are friends.

 

No more sheets.

No more legs and hands and nighttimes.

No more.

 

Lets just be friends.

Lets put it all behind us.

Author's Note

The word coax bothers me. Please tell me if that annoys you as well.
I don't think this poem is finished. I know that I would like for it to end differently.
Please share your thoughts.

Reviews

[Lambo]

There isn't an incredible amount of development over the course of this poem. It's sort of vague and blunt at the same time...indistinctly blunt, or deliberately a bit vague. But that isn't necessarily a bad thing, if that's what you're getting at. Maybe this is really the best way to tell that particular story, the most appropriate tone. Whether you choose to leave it alone or expand, I like what you have here. As for "coax," maybe lull, soothe, calm, something like that?

[SoulCrusader (Yas)]

Let them vanish as we sleep tonight. Would that make sense to you? But it would alter the direction of the poem! So maybe keep coax.

As the poem is wonderfully expressed:)

[KAREN]

Nice job! It's wonderful when two people can put hard times behind them and be friends forever. You expressed the desire for friendship to remain with feeling!

[Champagne]

I think 'coax' is ok. I liked the sentiment in this poem.

[Alexs Girl]

Coax probably is not the right word.... but all in all really good Amateur? or learning?

[Amy Vaughn]

Maybe let them sing us to sleep every night? As if the memories are capable of singing? Up to you.