Secret Love

Something quick I did, not sure how I feel about it. Definitely not my best, but it's something I guess.

If I said I love you,
would you say it back to me?
I've sat for hours,
imagining it,
too scared to try and see.
Don't want to tell you how I feel,
for fear you'll turn me down,
but if I don't,
I worry things will never turn around.
If I say I love you,
please don't answer with a lie.
Don't be too shy for honesty,
to make me sad or cry.
I want your love,
your heart and soul,
but only if you choose.
Since I don't really have you now,
I've got nothing to lose.
If I said I love you,
would you say it back to me?
I guess I'll work the courage up,
to set that secret free.

Reviews

[krish]

wow.......
awesome.......very nice............
heart breakable kid..............
89/100

[rnuff]

Such an amazing and emotional read.

[fiery-san]

Beautiful.So much emotion expressed and the frustration and hesitation of confessing to someone you like... Good job. ^_^

[Bitter Overdose]

Lovely poem. I've got nothing to say about the meaning, because it's just that wonderful (since love is such a pure poetry subject), but I do want to compliment you on your structure. It flows nicely, tumbling off the tongue. Nice work, you have a talent. Merry Christmas.