Autumn Leaves

Short piece about change of seasons.

The Autumn leaves are changing,

but they won't be here for long.

I want to take in all their beauty,

for I know they'll soon be gone.

They'll fall around me,

slow at first,

faster with each day.

I'll dance among them,

filled with joy,

then rake them all away.

The Autumn leaves are changing,

but they won't be here for long.

Author's Note

I'm nervous because it's the first time I'm working up the nerve to post something, so be gentle, but I do want opinions! Written while in treatment, so if it's a little disconnected that's probably why.

Reviews

[ksreetz]

There are all sorts of writing style and I like your direct and simple approach with this. This reader is really tired of reading poetry that is too abstract, never knowing the true intent of the writer, so this was nice and refreshing; it feels good to be able to actually read and understand and just enjoy the sentiment.

These are your words and your feelings - they are legitimate so don't be nervous about that. Post enough and you'll get good feedback, some ideas on how to say things better perhaps, maybe someone with a bad attitude once in a while, just like life in general I guess.

Anyway, this was an enjoyable read. Keep writing.

[Jagged memory]

Sad but yet beuatiful. I can feel this write. It's full of emotion.

[fiery-san]

This is strangely both a happy and sad poem. Yes, it's a weird description bit it fits for me. The tone how I took on the poem was cheery, almost child-like but the meaning within it rang with a message saying that things change and doesn't stay the same forever.

Overall, it was a good job. Keep it up. ^_^

[I AM]

This is really beautiful. The sense of imagery is perfect and it flows really well. Nice write.

[J. F. Charleston]

There's no disconnection that I could detect. It flowed nicely and brought some things out that you don't really think of when it's autumn.

[Hannah Jocks]

This was really good. Don't be nervous to post your wonderful works. You should never care what others think. Take in posative opinions and advice but dont worry about what people think. Just know that you can always improve your writing. But, this poem was very nice. Please put more of your writing up. I like this one. However, i found one typo... in the second line "bu they won't be here for long" I think the "bu" needs to be a "but" lol other than that the poem was beautiful.

[Hannah Messer]

Ugh you're right I need to fix that! Thanks so much!

[STRAND]

It's rather unfair of the author to require a soft touch of their would-be readers. Limiting one's reaction to art (good or bad) goes against the entire idea of creating it in the first place.

That being said, the only review I can apparently give is: IT IS WHAT IT IS.

[Hannah Messer]

I didn't say that the reaction couldn't be negative, I'd just rather someone be gentle if they're going to criticize, rather than be mean about it. I just think there's a nice way to go about criticism, being constructive and helpful, and then there's a mean, unhelpful way. I don't really get what "it is what it is" is supposed to mean, or how that's supposed to be helpful. But I guess I'll take that as you didn't like it, and just try to accept that some people aren't going to.