Mirrored Confusion

a poem in my created Dasyure Form

 amid the silence
 turbulent feelings abound
 whirling thoughts edging on violence
 darkness hovers without sound
 in thickening air

 see the tendons break
 as madness takes reign of care
 the price borne from one simple mistake
 a heart denied all reprieve
 senses first to leave

 failed existence
 in a mind devoid of ground
 reason hinders desired recompense
 solace nowhere to be found
 but in solemn stare

 trust left to forsake
 as shadows tauntingly dare
 all that hangs in this merciless wake
 is the promise one can weave
 hope upon one's sleeve

Author's Note

my created Dasyure Form is a poem of 4 stanzas each with 5 lines of text in the following format:
Stanzas 1 & 3 have the syllable count (in progressive lines) of 5,7,9,7,5 with a rhyme scheme of a,b,a,b,c.
Stanzas 2 & 4 also have a syllable count (in progressive lines) of 5,7,9,7,5 with a rhyme scheme of d,c,d,e,e.

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

The poem is amazing. I could take apart the lines and create a discussion. My favorites lines are.
"failed existence
in a mind devoid of ground
reason hinders desired recompense
solace nowhere to be found
but in solemn stare"
No weakness in this amazing poem.
Coyote

[Helena]

Very good my friend. Interesting form you have created. You penned a wonderful
poem using this form. A very haunting read. Well done! Thank you for submitting
this to my contest. ~ Helena