A Dream

I don't know what it is that you do to me

I don't know what it is that you did

But you got me down on my knees

Begging like a kid

That night, you left me speechless

That night, we did it big

Neither one of us were selfish

We gave it all that we could

But you blew my mind like nothing I've ever seen

And even though I've experienced you before

It's like you're something out of a dream

..a dream

Reviews

[Ravyne Hawke]

What I find pleasing in this piece is your use of repetition. It can either make or break a poem. You used it very well here. The overall theme of this, the dream, should have a hazy air to it; however, your words are realistic and powerful. That creates a dualistic nature to this poem. I think the protagonist longs for the dream but is caught up in reality. Isn't a dream always so much better? These are by far my two favorite lines:

And even though I've experienced you before
It's like you're something out of a dream

This is very well done, Erica. I have no suggestions for you, only praise. You are honing your skill as a poet and creating some remarkable poems.

[Erica Ross]

Oh, that means so much to me !! Thank you SO much for reading. Your feedback means a lot.

[Ravyne Hawke]

You are very welcome, Erica. I enjoy your work very much.

[esperanza]

I like this poem .

[Erica Ross]

Thank you. I am glad that you like it :)

[esperanza]

You're welcome .