Deadbeat?

His heart is beating,

faster and faster,

faster and faster.

Time is ticking,

Slower and slower,

Slower oh so slower.

She is running out of time,

Time is money to her.

Money to feed her kid,

That some say she had way too young.

She never thought she would end up this way.

Meeting with strange men,

Just to make ends meet.

Ends meet?

More like deadbeat,

That's what she thought anyway.

She came from a wealthy family,

But was always the outcast.

Having depression was the least of her problems.

She was beaten,

Beaten by her no good, filthy, alcoholic mother.

She the only child out of three to ever get hit.

She was constantly left out,

Never was invited to go shopping or to dinner.

And finally when she got pregnant at 17 was cut off.

Now you could say this was her own fault.

She choice certain aspects of her life but,

If she had a choice,

she would be saving people.

Saving them from abusive parents.

Saving them from making stupid decisions.

Saving them from changing their life for the worse.

Saving them, from being like her.

Author's Note

what do you thing I can fix?

Reviews

[Xander Lewis]

Your poem shows how abuse can affect someone for years to come. It is very sad that there is abuse in the world.
I noticed some small mistakes if you want to take a look. One of them is,
"She choice certain aspects of her life but," which should be "She chose certain aspects of her life."
The other one is "She the only child out of three to ever get hit", which would be better as "She was the only child out of three to ever get hit".
I hope this helps, and I hope you continue with your poetry writing

[J Todd Underhill]

Awesome write! I like it how it is. I host a poetry open mic on the internet and would love for you to add your voice www.worldpoetryopenmic.net Fridays 8pm mountain time!