Adverbially Adjacent

Adverbially Adjacent

she was exhaustingly beautiful

i was tirelessly enthralled

we kissed till we both dropped

 

swooning lips slipped quietly

into a stupor

when we woke

we reignited

funny how energy

revives

with passion's inexhaustibly churning fire

as the tirelessly incessant 

kindling between lovers

is accorded a spark

irrepressibly.

erin-cilberto

4/3/25

Reviews

[Everett Dulin]

I really enjoy this one. I don't have anything to add or say, it's just beautiful. It would be a disgrace to it to not say anything at all.

-E

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for your very kind words,
j.

[K. Louis]

This poem is breathtakingly lovely. The images of exhaustion and enthrallment, the swooning lips, and the reviving energy of passion...it all feels so deeply personal and intimate. The language is beautiful, I like the phrase "inexhaustibly churning fire".

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for your very kind words, K.
j.

[Renata]

Such a clever idea with the scattering of adverbs sprinkled throughout the poem.
Passion like has been described is certainly desirable.
That spark is so important to keeping the flame burning brightly between two people for any length of time. Without it, the coldness just creeps in.
A very original idea and one well expressed.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for your kind review, Renata,
j.

[Beren]

I felt this in my stomach. This poem is damned fascinating. An incredible poem from a great poet to a perfect love! I'll read this poem time to time!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I appreciate your kind words, Beren,
j.

[Thomas W Case]

Ahhh adverbs. Great work, my friend.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, Thomas,
j.