digging for some pleasant memories

digging for some pleasant memories

 

 

i am an earthworm

crawling into your peripheral

either to get your attention

or avoid it

i move slowly enough

to creep closer

but not fast enough

to escape your wrath

 

the ground between us 

is moist

once fertile from love,

now it is from years of tears

 

i might be fishing for forgiveness

or just swimming in the mud

of my confusion

no eyes to see the reasons

 

our days together

are just a slow pain

waiting to be struck

by the mouth of understanding.

 

 

erin-cilberto

4/1/25

Reviews

[Beren]

OH SIR! I am truly amazed! How much more emotionally charged visuality could your narration have provided... I understand better why you are the best writer here with each of your poems. PERFECT ONE! I have read it many times, I am reading it, I will read it
Please forgive my enthusiasm, I loved this poem very much and I don't know how else to explain it... Have a great week sir!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for your very kind review, Beren,
j.

[Laz K.]

the tragedy of the earthworm is that it doesn't undergo some magical transformation unlike the caterpillar, for example, which, of course, turns into a butterfly. but, maybe the earthworm can transform and sublimate (in a sense) the very dirt it eats and eats endlessly, making it more fertile. what a useful creature it is after all!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

the real earthworm, useful. what the earthworm represents not so much.
Thanks for your review, Laz,
j

[John the Baptist]

When it's over it's over, but sometimes it's not. The speaker here continues to dig like an earthworm to hold on to something that was good for a while, but then went really sour. There appears to be hope of a revival, but I'd say there's a lot more digging ahead.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for your words, John,
j.

[Dessi]

On my way to read a different work of yours, I saw this.
It really affected my heart, J.
I think we ignore some very important things, and people,
although not intentionally.
Maybe that earthworm needs to put a bug in the ear of its desire.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your very kind review, Dessi,
j.

[Desert Knave]

The second verse alone strikes WAY too deep into me. You have a remarkable way with words. ~Jim

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for your words, Jim,
j.

[Cassie]

Quite relatable...very nice one

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, Cassie,
j.

[Inkspire]

Nice poem
The earthworm metaphor is great.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, Inkspire,
j.