Critics

Critics

 

 

several vultures

hovered over my poem

waiting to erase

the remains

    of what they declared

    a moribund thought

 

 

erin-cilberto

3/29/25

Reviews

[ETERNITY]

Oh, no! no!
NOBODY declares ANY art lifeless!
ALL ART IS LIFE!
Art can be deliberated, deciphered, deduced.
If I spit on a piece of paper and say "ART"... it is ...well...spit on a piece of paper...But you get me.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Yes, I get you....Thanks, Eternity.
j.

[Fabian G. Franklin]

They say Latin is a dead language but a great many doctors seem to communicate with it. Is that like a language séance? Medical necromancy? Anyway, the blue penciling editors will have out their swords to cut the first critique. After that who knows what villagers shall follow with torches and pitchforks? I adored this poem. It was short but had a succinct punch to it.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Torches and pitchforks and that poor monster who was made with an evil brain and yet hated its own violent acts...do critics hate their violent red pens?

Thank you, Fabian,
j.

[D. Mansfield]

Anyone who has anything to write, anything at all, would understand why that is inappropriate here. People who can't? Who really gives a s**t

[jacob erin-cilberto]

good question, D.
good question.
j.

[Ted Kniffen]

It seems those who "can" ... "do"

Those who "can't" criticize.

Easily down by some doofud in the comment section

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thanks, Ted...it's like people who laugh at others who dance funny...and where are they? Sitting this one out...

[Ted Kniffen]

Exactly ... and that should read done not down.
Getting back at writing shortly ... the Muse has made like a lot of snowbirds and wintered in Florida ... much to my chagrin.

[Desert Knave]

LOL. I love this. I sometimes wonder what drives those whose comments are never anything but critical. Oh well, if one could please everybody they'd get bored with writing pretty damned quickly. ~Jim

[jacob erin-cilberto]

what did Lincoln say? "you can please some of the people all of the time and all of the people some of the time, but you can't please all the people all the time. Smart President...wonder if he wrote poetry.

[Lorry]

Anyone who starts their review with "well I just think" should be electrocuted every time they use their keyboard.... At least that's what i think! 😃

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thanks Lorry...get the voltage ready.

[andrew mitchell]

There will always be critics but maybe when it’s picked clean, the poem will be easy to read by the archeologists or maybe the vultures were looking for a hidden meaning. Clever as always.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Or there will be vulture bones next to the body of the poem because the vulture died of starvation...or excess ripping.

[Betty Hermelee]

I think this is foreboding of things to come....if we don't have free speech to be able to express ourselves in different ways then we are subject to exclusions ism and authoritarian rules....i conclude by saying that the vultures are now our king and his cohorts.....little words, big thoughts!
Well done J...though i may be way off base
Warmly, B

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Never way off base...I like where you took this...thank you for your insights, my friend.
j.

[Betty Hermelee]

my pleasure J.
Warmly, B

[Chris Shaw]

I found some humour here as well as dark and powerful imagery j. When I post poems, there is something of me always waiting for the vultures to pick the bones of my poems apart. I guess we can show our vulnerability at times, particularly with our writing.

You also on a darker note reminded me of an award winning photographer who captured vultures waiting on a starving, dying child. I have never forgotten that devastating image.

Love your work my friend. I travel in your lines.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

That image is quite harsh to say the least...Thank you for your words, Chris.
j.