the hours of us

the hours of us

 

 

in the small thicket

a life's moment happened

stinging thorns

poison ivy thoughts

touched my heart

with irrational response

 

I bled for days

scratching the itch of time

until clarity

let me forget

you ever happened.

 

 

erin-cilberto

3/9/25

Reviews

[A.H.]

wonderfully written, the choice of words, the mood of the write and flows effortlessly. life and love happens, one looks back, reflects on it and bleed for it. need moving on too, so well penned. thanks j.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for your very kind words, A.H.
j.

[andrew mitchell]

Yes in love we don’t see any imperfections but take away those rose coloured glasses and you see things in a different light. Doesn’t take much but falling out of love and all is revealed. Yes that garden of Eden has some unpleasant surprises in store. So well done J as per your usual.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, andrew...you are kind.
j.

[1809 Black Plague Decem..]

Dear, Jacob erin-cilberto, a forgetful moment that "it ever happened" and essence of time, great write! ---Maynard

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for your kind comment, Maynard,
j.

[1809 Black Plague December]

You are most welcome Jacob-erin-ciberto, I always enjoy reading your posts, it is great pleasure, and eddifice, :D

[Relic]

Some gardens need to be sprayed to get rid of the weeds.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Amen...thank you, Relic,
j.

[Beren]

Wow great chosen words sir. This is one of my favorite of your poems. I admire this one, great harmony.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for your kind words, Beren,
j.

[Fabian G. Franklin]

Some have clarity, some have Claritin, whatever helps the itchy eyes that water for whatever reason. At any rate it sounds like our protagonist needed to get out of the thicket of things and find an open field of flowers to lay in...don't forget the Claritin. A love that makes you feel allergic might be better to avoid. Nicely crafted as always. F.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Ha ha...yes, where is that spray?
Thank you, FAbian...
j.

[Dylan Macadham]

Memories haunt. Especially of Love's pain, received ...and given.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, Dylan...
j.

[Lorry]

Those poison ivy thoughts can drive us all to distraction Jacob, but thank the heavens for clarity and her intervention... well, that and antibiotics! 😃

[jacob erin-cilberto]

We do need more clarity...
thanks, Lorry,
j.

[Costa Siwale]

These words were woven together seamlessly. Wow!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for your kind comment, Costa,
j.

[Desert Knave]

Another of those writes that immediately brought one particularly unpleasant person from my past to mind. Well done. ~Jim

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, Jim,
j