Break-Up

Break-up

 

 

I saw the trashman

emptying the barrel

in front of my house

and saw a discarded poem

slip out of the wastebin

screaming to be saved---

 

but I had already

moved on.

 

 

erin-cilberto

3/8/25

Reviews

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

That poor poem. You had moved on grown and it ended up in the tip oh well we do all change and Grow
I wonder if it survived the journey and was saved by a young person and it may inspire

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Nice idea, Julie...
j.

[Carlos Lorenzo Estrada]

I'm so glad I have most of my writing on my tablet and back it up on a flash drive. But in the 70s and 80s growing up I used to use a type writer or notepad. I lost a lot of angst and emo driven writings back then. I wish I could go back and save some of that stuff. The way I feel about writing is that every word is a foundation towards your artistic journey. They are the spoils and trinkets that signify your growth, not just as a writer but as a human being. CLE

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Carlos, I hear ya. Back in college, I started writing. I have about 7 notebooks full of writing...all in long hand...awful stuff, I can hardly stand to look out now...but we have to start somewhere, right? And I had an old pink Underwood that a friend fixed up for me...it was slow going...Now we type on a keyboard and save...And writing is definitely an artistic journey of growth.
I wish you still had some of that stuff you did not save...I long to read it.
j.

[Costa Siwale]

Terse but sharp! It is strange how once intense relationships just cease to be.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Yes, very strange...thank you, Costa.
j.

[Lorry]

The answer my friend is blowin' in the wind. The answer is blowin' in the wind.
I felt the same years ago when i returned home to find it on fire and the ashes blinding me came with a thought that it was raining poetry.
Now i barely think of all tge words forgotten to time.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Raining poetry...nice concept.
thanks, Lorry,

[John the Baptist]

All of us who have written for some time know how it feels to look back at some of our earlier works and wonder how we could have written such stuff. But in many ways we are different people now.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Very different people...thank you, John,
j.

[ETERNITY]

Hi J, this title just seemed appropriate to me at this time for some reason.

It surprised me that it would be about a poem but the point was well made. Thanks.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, Eternity.
j.

[ETERNITY]

my pleasure J

[Beren]

right on time sir. There was no more perfect timing to publish this poem. personally thank you.

and objectively this is perfectly written. powerful. and said a lot.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

you related, I believe?
Thank you for feeling it...it is what we hope our poetry might do.read moreyou related, I believe?
Thank you for feeling it...it is what we hope our poetry might do.
j.

[Beren]

Yes I related, your poem did it job. Thanks again.