no other way to go

no other way to go

 

 

baby rage

grows up to be

teenage displacement

society's distant relative

 

Prodigal smile

never returns

the smoking gun

the bleeding signature

 

on a will

of permanent

expulsion

 

his heart dies

taking others with him.

 

 

erin-cilberto

2/17/25

Reviews

[Chris Shaw]

Society’s distant relative. Not fitting in and feeling isolated. That rage inside can turn nasty. It can destroy a person, eat away at them or worse still can turn on others and destroy them. My mind drifted to high school massacres, as the worse possible outcome. Quite a deadly situation.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

And I wonder how many could be avoided if spotted early enough.
j.

[Chris Shaw]

Too right. Early intervention I’m sure would prevent so many tragedies and who can get their hands on guns :(

[John the Baptist]

This one is very pertinent to me. In a neighboring city, two cops were shot and killed by a guy who later killed himself. He was in his 40's. Baby rage recalled.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

That is so sad...two cops who merely are trying to protect and serve the public...and now they are two empty seats at the dinner table...so hard on the families.
j.

[emmajoygreen]

'his heart dies
taking others with him.'

Is often the way, emotions gone astray, space darkens even the sun.. to each his or her own, sadly.
jacob, sir, you say little but achieve so much and.. sincerely.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, em.
j.

[emmajoygreen]

My thanks and pleasure, Jacob

[Desert Knave]

No, the prodigal smile never really does return, except as a spiteful grimace. Strong words. ~Jim

[jacob erin-cilberto]

you are so right, jim
thank you
j.

[Lorry]

This should be on the curriculum for any school age child to show that every action, no matter how young has consequences. Maybe then they would realise that their actions do have consequences, no matter how unfair they think they are.
Once again, very nicely captured Jacob.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Lorry.
j.

[DIVYA]

A very relatable poem for me, always "society's distant relative, on a will of permanent expulsion". You always have something to delight me.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you my friend,
j.

[K. Louis]

This poem seems to explore themes of disconnection and isolation, particularly in relation to societal expectations and family dynamics. The imagery is intense, painting a picture of someone struggling to cope with the weight of their surroundings. Well done, Jacob.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for your kind review, K.
j.