surrender

surrender

 

 

hold the river still

with a touch of your eye

and the current will heel

with imminent affection

 

a reflection

bowing to your beauty

as you tiptoe

across the tamed white caps

 

and rest where the jovial 

moon dances across

the cut glass image

immersed in the slowed swell

 

erin-cilberto

2/18/25

Reviews

[Dylan Macadham]

I've a feeling you're writing about, perhaps your muse or a lover past or present. Who or whatever, it's a beautiful piece :)

[Chris Shaw]

There is a beautiful calmness in this piece. The title is excellent and to me is a reflection on what once was. Without doubt there is still much love. The imagery is captivating. Moments well invested.

Chris

[Poetic Beauty]

This poem made me picture a pale dark haired woman tip toeing across a creek or pond under the moonlight. I maybe way off but it was a beautiful image it conjured in my mind.

[DIVYA]

Your words hold a world of sorrow and love in them. I can feel the memories that dance in every line. Its all so alive, as if we are still with the loved one. A very special poem, true surrender..

[K. Louis]

This is lovely. You have a gift for capturing the tranquility of a moment in a way that's both vivid and dreamy.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

It started out being a poem about my mother...and then turned into something else...or maybe not.read moreIt started out being a poem about my mother...and then turned into something else...or maybe not.
Thank you for your very kind comment, K.
j.