surrender

surrender

 

 

hold the river still

with a touch of your eye

and the current will heel

with imminent affection

 

a reflection

bowing to your beauty

as you tiptoe

across the tamed white caps

 

and rest where the jovial 

moon dances across

the cut glass image

immersed in the slowed swell

 

erin-cilberto

2/18/25

Reviews

[Katrina Mckeown]

You certainly paint a scene.. very poetically and beautifully penned.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Katrina,
j.

[W. Barrett Munn]

Lovely Jacob.
For some reason you took me towards Leonard Cohen and “Suzanne”.
But, of course, you didn’t feed me tea and oranges that came all the way from China.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I love that song....thank you.
j.

[schlanks]

A beautifully vivid painting in word form dripping with admiration and longing. Written with a true classic poet's touch.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for your kind words, schlanks.

[Fabian G. Franklin]

Rivers are impossible to tame unless you're a dam builder and even then the dams sometime collapse and flood. Until the river runs wild again. And then, there the dam builder sits, all broken in the detritus of the waste washed downstream; pummeled by limbs and dislodged bits of hope. Is it better than chasing swirling eddies like our tail in the froth? I really couldn't say. But if the dam breaks, it's best to be as far away from the ensuing flood as possible.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I really appreciate your in-depth review, Fabian.
j.

[Fabian G. Franklin]

"Oh, the water. Let it run all over me." Van Morrison But Van might have been stoned when he wrote that. ;)

[redzone]

I knew it!! Jacob is a die-hard romantic. and what a great line of poetry, "a reflection bowing to your beauty as you tiptoe across the tamed white caps". Jacob, as I read, I just wanted to dive into that "slowed swell" and meet this woman of beauty who walks across white caps and has enticed your words, as well as your heart it seems.

Have to agrre, wholeheartedly, with Kelly, you are a "different breed of poet". -Curt

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for your kind review, Curt.
j.

[Kelly Scheppers]

You are of a different breed of poet, J. I'm convinced of it. It's underrated how so many of your readers become immersed in the caliber of your writing. I marvel at it, I really do.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

You are very kind, Kelly.
Thank you.
j.

[Relic]

Excellent metaphorical poem, J. :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, Relic,
j.

[andrew mitchell]

Beautiful writing J, love the serenity, very smooth, reflective, calming.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for your words, andrew,
j.

[Dylan Macadham]

I've a feeling you're writing about, perhaps your muse or a lover past or present. Who or whatever, it's a beautiful piece :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for your words, Dylan,
j.

[Chris Shaw]

There is a beautiful calmness in this piece. The title is excellent and to me is a reflection on what once was. Without doubt there is still much love. The imagery is captivating. Moments well invested.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for your kind review, Chris,
j.