karaoke of the unwashed

karaoke of the unwashed

 

 

windmills wake wind chimes

into fake chorus

lies push clouds into view

as the sound deafens

sense

that just goes round and round

becoming a steady rain.

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

2/9/25

Reviews

[K. Louis]

the image of the "wind chimes waking wind" and "lies pushing clouds into view" creates a sense of chaos. but the line "sense that goes round and round" is where you really grab hold of something profound. Its like the feeling of being in a constant loop, searching for answers without ever finding resolution. The simplicity of the phrase makes it relatable. Well penned, Jacob.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for your kind review, K.
j.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

The weather can change on a dime, and seldom can accurately be predicted.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Dale....hope you are well, my poetic friend.
j.