Dropping innocence and surging intimacy is a whirlwind affair with consequences to bare, even fair distance observers surely get a tempest in their tea cup or coffee mug, whichever in the moment is handy. Superb j. 👍🏻🕊🙏🏻
Loneliness is a killer. Those two strangers approaching familiarity, probably didn’t notice the fly on the wall. They were probably only too pleased to have the warmth of some company. That fly though, sounds interesting.
Chris
Posted 1 Month Ago
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1 Month Ago
AT least this fly saw two people comfort each other, unlike Emily Dickinson's fly that just buzzed w.. read moreAT least this fly saw two people comfort each other, unlike Emily Dickinson's fly that just buzzed when her speaker died.
thank you, Chris,
j.
JEC,
How long have you known this fly? They are pretty promiscuous here in Texas...
Vol
Posted 1 Month Ago
1 Month Ago
This one is quite moral and was really embarrassed by what he saw.
Thanks for the smile, Vol,.. read moreThis one is quite moral and was really embarrassed by what he saw.
Thanks for the smile, Vol,
j.
there is nothing like love-making following a period of grief. the comfort, the feeling of security, of being wanted, appreciated, having somewhere on this earth to belong. well, it's those things but also just good ol' merry-making.
the perspective of this work was very interesting. an insect in the same room, probably unnoticed by the actors. yet even this simple creature understands the significance of what is going on. animal instincts combined with a disctinctly human desire for actualization.
very smart writing.
We think the fly a pest, but what thinks the fly of our disgusting misdeeds?
Casting aside the odd plague or three, which if the rats don't get the blame, it will be the flies, I don't remember them commiting any intended genocide. At least not on our scale.
I'm with the flies on this one Jacob!
Posted 1 Month Ago
1 Month Ago
Interesting....they probably think we are worse pests than they are to us.
j.
The "trappings" of love suggests something less than sincerity. These two seem rather desperate, though good things could possibly result from their coupling.
Posted 1 Month Ago
1 Month Ago
very desperate....thank you for your review, John,
j.
Originally from Bronx, NY, I live in Carbondale, Illinois...teach English at a community college and have been writing and publishing poetry since 1970. I am here to read for inspiration from other po.. more..