Skirmish

Skirmish

 

 

a passive-aggressive enemy

spreads across the lines

a body's territory

obliges unwillingly

 

fights across boundaries

a heart refuses to surrender

denies

 

the enemy retreats

life goes on

its soldiers in recovery

 

 

erin-cilberto

1/15/2025

Reviews

[Titilayo Sarah Eguridu]

The metaphor is powerful.
Life is a constant fight.
Facing the obstacles and protecting your territory is a must because no battle lasts for ever.
It ends…then we pick up from there but first we fight…because our lives depend on it.
Erin, this piece packs a punch!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you so much, Titilayo,
j.

[Titilayo Sarah Eguridu]

You’re welcome

[Kay Salisu Titilola]

This can be viewed in so many ways but I'll go with this point of view. I read a voice in the poem that says, as long as there is skirmish between nations, races, religion, or humanity in general there will be no assurance of rest and healing in the world. The only situation that can bring peace into the world is when we all realized that war and enmity can't solve all problems, then we will all begin to heal.

Great one here Jacob. You left me pondering.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I appreciate your review, Kay, and I really like where you went with this piece. Yes, war solves nothing.

[LisaCarol]

I’ve tried to leave a review on this one and website keeps crashing. I felt this could apply to various situations and was a very thoughtful and touching poem. Well done!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you very much for your kind review, Lisa,
and yes, the site is doing that tonight.
read moreThank you very much for your kind review, Lisa,
and yes, the site is doing that tonight.
j.

[Poetic Beauty]

This to me sounds like someone who has heart problems and had to have surgery and is now recovering

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for your take, P.B....
j.

[Ern M. Yoshimoto]

there is so much violence in the world, although not often against the body. we abhor it when a war is waged or a punch thrown, but hatred and anger can come in many guises. and here we pull back the veneer of civility and see the naked truth. there is vileness in our souls and it latches on to its prey when stirred.
it's a dark piece, but speaks much truth.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for your kind review, Ern,
j.

[Sami Khalil]

Skirmish is the preparation for an all out war; to test your enemy and your readiness in love and War.
I hope you have good fortification Jacob or you will be an easy target.
I love it!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I will try to fortify, my friend.
Thank you, Sami,
j.

[Sami Khalil]

Hehehe
You are welcome sir Jacob!

[Desert Knave]

"The enemy retreats ... life goes on.". Hopefully it does go on. Very strong writing and nicely open for the reader to fill in the blanks. ~Jim

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, Jim.....I appreciate when readers like the openness of my work....it is meant for that.read moreThank you, Jim.....I appreciate when readers like the openness of my work....it is meant for that.
j.

[Linda alexander]

This writing has multiple layers and shades. Imagine pancreatic cancer usually it comes as very passive in general no symptoms the candidate may observe especially in the first or second stages unless it is an incidental finding or mere luck. If detected early well and good but if otherwise body fights it with sypport of medical interventions. Mentally fights it too. Enemy is aggresive so real war is happening and lots of damage to the patient for example side effects of chenotherapy and cachexia. Finally cancer leaves the body called as remission still body has a long road towards recovery. The same principles in depressionother mental disorders, other stress list goes on. Also relationships can also come as villain similsr to cancer. Later the person leaves and some releif ftom the toxic rekstionsip but sequelae of that toxicity follows the person for long time. This can be applicable to other areas of society. Wow to this poem professor jacob👍

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for your very kind and understanding review, Linda.
j.

[Eilis]

I love the openness of your metaphors, Jacob. You make this seem so effortless to create these fine tuned poetic landscapes.

My first thought was of an invading love, affection that needs to be quashed. Something that unsettles the soul, shakes the core. Those movements can shake our worlds completely.

But then I did see how it could also apply to the body itself being invaded by foreign bodies. The fight, the will and the triumph. We pray for the triumph.

Your work is so finely honed.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I really appreciate these kind words, Eilis...
very encouraging to this blue collar poet.
read moreI really appreciate these kind words, Eilis...
very encouraging to this blue collar poet.
j.

[redzone]

Sun Tzu wrote "The Art of War", and poets, continue to write "The Art of Love". In either case, the warrior's heart often suffers from PTSD. And so far, in human history, a cure has never been found.
-Curt

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Very often...thank you, Curt, for your words,
j.