the roar of beads

the roar of beads

 

the street is filled

with red fluid

senseless sinful sobriety

solemnly sprung severance

 

catastrophic sounds

jizzed jazz mocking

the street rocking

with the sound of tires

spraying bloody notes

 

as the drum creates an eerie sound

spirits that are usually drunk

in lascivious labor

rise above in cautious number

 

another stain in the rain

of insanity.

 

erin-cilberto

1/4/25

Reviews

[redzone]

we live in a society whose social fabric is shredding apart, where it is commonplace for insanity take the form of mass murder, then taken even further by the insanity of power-hungry leaders who can commit even more heinous crimes with just the push of a button. America was never great and it is getting less great by the hour. What kind of system do we live under, Jacob? And why do we put up with it?
-Curt

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Yes, it is getting less great...and I don't know why we put up with it...
thanks for the comments,
j.

[MCS]

Brilliant piece of writing my friend. When does the madness end?

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, Mary,
j.

[Kelly Scheppers]

I don't believe I could ever begin to capsulize this tragedy with the overwhelming detail you've executed to honor its memory. The lives it took, the carnage upon the streets, the screams in the night air, and the horror of it happening over and over again, day after day, from one city to another. "Another stain in the rain of insanity". Brilliantly composed, Jacob. Another page in history!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Yes, one city after another, one crazy-senseless episode of carnage...Thank you for your kind review, Kelly.
It has to stop somewhere, someday.
j.

[Desert Knave]

Wonderfully written considering the morbid nature of it all. ~Jim

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, Jim....it just saddens me so to see the constant slaughter of innocent people.
j.

[Arundass TP]

Cities have all distractions. No calmness. Good poem

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for your kind comment, Arundass,
j.

[Laz K.]

a difficult topic...hurt people hurt people...violence begets violence...one hopes that Divine Justice exists and things do make sense and things will be put right...somehow...

(i really wanted to say something, but all i can think of is cliches...)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

The violence is starting to be a cliche...So senseless...thank you, Laz,
j.

[LisaCarol]

Very powerful words here about a senseless tragedy. Thank you for sharing your writing.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for the read and the kind comment, Lisa,
j.

[J Todd Underhill]

We to encapsulate the tragedy that occurred. I feel for the innocent people who were lost and maimed. Your words are golden here!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, J Todd,
such a devastating tragedy. People are so crazy these days. Senseless.
read moreThank you, J Todd,
such a devastating tragedy. People are so crazy these days. Senseless.
j.

[Chris Shaw]

I wasn’t there, but your words found me as a bystander, out of reach, watching the carnage unfold. But it was the sounds, the terrible sounds that scar my heart this morning. Superb poetry j. What an insane and ugly world we live in.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I wish there weren't these kinds of events for inspiration...
too tragic and sad.

read moreI wish there weren't these kinds of events for inspiration...
too tragic and sad.

Thank you, Chris,
j.