tip me over

tip me over

there is a flat fee

for breaking my heart

but you made such

competent commitment

of it,

i will have to indulge you

a cumbersome gratuity

so you never

forget me---

weightily winsome words.

erin-cilberto

1/4/25

Reviews

[Einstein Noodle]

well done sir jacob! well done indeed .. the subtle seering payback with panache .. i really like this one .. very fine!
E.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, E,
j.

[Sami Khalil]

I was going with:
" Float like a butterfly, sting like a bee."
Long live the Champion of poetry
Jacob

[jacob erin-cilberto]

"Cause George Foreman can't hit what he can't see"
My hero....
thanks, Sami.
j.

[Sami Khalil]

Wow! You are welcome sir Jacob

[Ookpik]

Good duels always end with a flourish - well struck, Jacob, glad to see the edge is still sharp.

Here’s to heartbreak that heals easy.

-Ook

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for your kind words, Ook,
j.

[Sami Khalil]

Well, she pulled you in head over heels, tied you down in a relationship then tipped you over on one side; at least you were able to get back up in the ring of love punching.
Awesome!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for your kindness, Sami,
j.

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome sir Jacob.

[Chris Shaw]

Dear j, there is unmistaken humour in this poem of heartbreak. Only you could pull this off to perfection. Magnifique.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, Chris,
j.

[Soren]

As you often do, again clever wording and a twist in view makes this a gem. It speaks of pain in a humerous manner and so you have succeeded in what I would call a triple duality a poetic hat trick. A most wonderful write

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for your kind review, Soren,
j.