tip me over

tip me over

there is a flat fee

for breaking my heart

but you made such

competent commitment

of it,

i will have to indulge you

a cumbersome gratuity

so you never

forget me---

weightily winsome words.

erin-cilberto

1/4/25

Reviews

[Re-Pete]

cleverly cerebral. everything has its price. it's never pleasant when the bill comes due.

“The cost of a thing is the amount of what I will call life which is required to be exchanged for it, immediately or in the long run.” - Thoreau

[Desert Knave]

If they're going to break your heart then they should, hopefully, at least make that competent commitment. Nicely worded. ~Jim

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thanks Jim....I thought this poem might just be seen as silly...but everyone has looked much deeper into it...I appreciate all of the readers here at WC.

[Red Brick Keshner]

Love this! A bundle of everything meshed together with such eloquence! The enjoyment brought by your work is a constant in my regimen. 🙏🏻👍🏻🕊

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you so much, Freds,
j.

[Red Brick Keshner]

Your welcome 🙏🏻

[icelandicblue]

I love the hard c’s and the w alliteration. It’s always a pleasure to read your work.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

You are so very kind,
always nice to see you back around...
j.

[Thomas W Case]

Powerful work. Sad and poignant.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, Thomas.
j.

[Fabian G. Franklin]

You should have sung her that song by Sir Elton John and Kiki Dee from the start. I take my kid and let her leave a gratuity at the restaurant. We always get great service and extras! Last time she got a free refill on her drink to take away and a free chocolate brownie. I wish I knew her trick. (laughing)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

"Don't go breaking my heart!"
Your daughter has charisma...charm....and generosity...
j.

[MCS]

At first glance the reader smiles but then the weight of sadness sets in. Nicely done my friend.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, Mary,
j.

[MCS]

Jacob, always enjoy your posts.

[Betty Hermelee]

A very clever poem on heartbreak.... I love the fact that you make perfect humor out of this!!! I think you stung her in the end!!!
Great...
Warmly, B

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for your words, Betty,
j.

[Betty Hermelee]

Always a pleasure J.
Warmly, B

[Dylan Macadham]

Turning heartbreak to humor! Wish I'd thought of this clever twist :)
Dylan

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for your kind comment, Dylan,
j.

[Einstein Noodle]

well done sir jacob! well done indeed .. the subtle seering payback with panache .. i really like this one .. very fine!
E.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, E,
j.