the flavor of significance

the flavor of significance

alarmingly sweet

sugar coated esteem

chewably crafted

mattering like a smattering

of chocolate sweat

arrival of confidence

melt in the mouth words

said brazenly

the best version

of me

the old version 

of me

a poemful version

of me

the only version

of me.

erin-cilberto

12/3/24

Reviews

[Ern M. Yoshimoto]

earning respect is the highest aspiration in us. and your description of the feeling of being seen is spot on. and the line: 'a poemful version of me' is amazing. we write when we are inspired and living in the moment. being that poemful person is an exhilirating feeling, and you captured that too. good stuff.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your very kind words, Ern.
j.

[W. Barrett Munn]

So I should throw out that old bottle of wine? I think not. Some things grow better with age. Some things turn into vinegar. But even vinegar when combined with oil makes a salad dressing. Happy vinegrette day, Jacob, you old bottle of fine wine.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for the smile, Winston,
j.

[LadyNaida]

Hi Jacob, this reminds me of the many mask we wear in order to get through life's journey while trying to conceal the real identity of the one who wears it. Great read!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for your words, LadyNaida,
j.

[LadyNaida]

You're welcome.

[hayzed]

the only version that matters.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, hayzed,
j.

[Patricia Wedel]

dear Jacob... self esteem can be Rich when we taste the Significance of Life. softly, Pat

[jacob erin-cilberto]

and we hope the taste lingers.
thank you, Pat,
j.

[Lorry]

This runs like a self critique, beginning with perhaps what others think of us and ends with our only truth, that we can only be the person we are, and you Sir are a poet from the soles of your feet to the soul of who you are.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for those kind words, Lorry,
j.

[Chris Shaw]

This poem packs a punch j, it reads to me about superficial rather than genuine. A pretence that something is better than it really is. Putting on an act or show.

mattering like a smattering
of chocolate sweat

is a brilliant line

I see this as a person who underestimates themselves and the impact they have. Do they struggle with their worth and are they now seeing themselves in a positive light, I ask myself.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your spot on review, Chris,
j.