Belonging

Belonging

 

 

 

a little murmur

heart in transition

few beats short of a cry

 

i saw you yesterday

in the lake's reflection

the water's swirl

still could not extinguish

 

the flame

you became.

 

 

erin-cilberto

11/30/24

Reviews

[Michael Sun Bear]

This one I really love. It says so much with so few words. It has beauty.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for your kind words, Michael,
j.

[Red Brick Keshner]

Hey j; The contrast between minimalistic language and their profound emotions is quite an alluring crafting. The idea of sustaining and un-extinguishing of memories is something to cherish.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, Freds...appreciate your words.
j.

[Red Brick Keshner]

You are most welcome j!
Freds

[Kelly Scheppers]

That last line got me. I swallowed hard, remembering precisely who it conjured into mind. The heart remembers, even if we choose to forget. But do we really?

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I don't think we do, thank you, Kelly,
j.

[Soren]

A wonderful poem that gives one thought. If it is a reflection that one sees in the lake, then it is of oneself, although possibly another could be close by. I love poems like this that are somewhat ambiguous and leave the reader thinking about the poem long afterwards

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I like where you took this...thank you, Soren,
j.

[Glenda]

IF I HAD READ THE COMMENTS...

I would have known this was a lost love.

So sorry, J, for answering so nonchalant.

Please forgive ...G

[jacob erin-cilberto]

On the contrary, I liked your interpretation very much.
j.

[Glenda]

I'm honored, J. Thank you.

[Linda alexander]

Memories they can be seen in water swirls but the heart makes it in to a flame and it is not within our control but to extinguish the flame also not practically possible so poet name it as ever living memories . Really liked it a lot

[jacob erin-cilberto]

THank you for your kind words, Linda,
j.

[Betty Hermelee]

sometimes reflections in the water remain in your mind's eye....and they just don't go away....a poignant piece ...sweet memories will last...poem flows beautifully, love it J.
Warmly,
B

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for your kind words, Betty,
j.

[Betty Hermelee]

you are very welcome J.
Warmly, B

[Desert Knave]

A couple days back I saw someone walking and was sure it was an ex ... but, of course, wasn't. Yeah, some things are never quite extinguished. ~Jim

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Appreciate your words, Jim,
j.

[Coyote Poetry]

Yes Jacob. Our memories can make us remember. The good days lost.
"i saw you yesterday
in the lake's reflection
the water's swirl
still could not extinguish"
I do understand the above lines. Now, us who love to write. We release to paper and pen. Thank you my friend for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for your kind review, Coyote,
j.

[John the Baptist]

Be careful with those transitions. A needy heart can see things that aren't really there.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Yes, that is true.
j.