When Rhythm Fails

When Rhythm Fails

blatant lies

in the womb

of peril

infamy tells blatant

truths

History is afterbirth

allowed to stagnate

as we sit in a waiting room

of years

expectant parents

knowing what is to come

is all relative

to what is redone

when we reproduce

mistakes 

creating offspring

of regrets

erin-cilberto

11/26/24

Reviews

[Patricia Wedel]

dear Jacob.. we have lived Unique Lives... shared feelings and returned favors. In Nature there is affection... and no regrets as we fluff our Feathers and survive the Weather. Our Spirit lives on and enters a new born child that will continue where we let go. The Show must go on. tenderly, Pat

[jacob erin-cilberto]

and you have so much kind spirit, Pat....
j.

[redzone]

2 thoughts came to me as I read your poem, Jacob. First, it reminded me somewhat of that definition of being crazy, "doing the same thing over and over again, expecting a different result". and second: we can wait for history to happen, or we can make it happen. And, along with this, history (in the largest sense), is not circular, but a continuing flow with sometimes punctuated leaps, but within each era, changes are made. There is no pendulum that swings back and forth in our lives (personal history), but, in the march of time, there is our activity that makes the difference. And sometimes these acts or actions do definitely lead to regrets, or what could have beens especially if we have not learned from past history.

Thanks Jacob for allowing me to think on this groggy Sunday morning. -Curt

[jacob erin-cilberto]

but there will not be a different result...I appreciate your insights on this piece, Curt,
j.

[Stella Armour]

I don't think rhythm is ever the full beat, sometimes notes are missed and throws the whole cycle out.
Regret of the offspring beat should never happen even if it is a surprise.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Appreciate where you took this, Stella,
j.

[Soren]

The most clever title that fits so well with this poem of terms for birth and reproduction. Very well written Jacob and it makes a good point that the reader will get if he reads this with care. Brilliant.!!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for your very kind review, Soren,
j.