poem

poem

 

i will be arraigned 

for loving you

and the rain will be falling

outside the courtroom

 

as i testify of my feelings

trying to express them

as accurately as i remember them

the day you walked away

 

leaving me the only witness

with a heart barely beating 

but the vision lucid as ever

even with the rain falling harder now.

 

 

erin-cilberto

10/15/24

Reviews

[Writergurl]

I like your imagery in this write, I can feel sadness in this write.
nicely expressed

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Writergurl,
j.

[Writergurl]

not a problem

[mabel mae]

yes, yes, i agree. love is something we must be guilty of otherwise why would we feel it so deeply?
amazing work. -mabel

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for your words, mabel mae,
j.

[Dave W.]

Wow this was really great, I love to picture you paint of court and being guilty of love, being left in a prison for feeling something and being the only one still there holding the emotion. really good.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for your kind review, Dave,
j.

[Sami Khalil]

If love is a crime then lock me up. I have no lawyer but an umbrella to fend off the rainy days. I have a hope it might set me free, innocent as a bird.
Marvelous metaphors in a splendid poem.
All rise now!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I think your umbrella might be weapon enough, Sami...
wield it....:)))

[Sami Khalil]

Hehehe. Yes siiiirrrrr.

[Tumi]

This is a poignant poem, showcasing the depth of longing
using a courtroom metaphor,
greatly expressed, eloquently penned

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, tumi,
j.