Start building the boat

Start building the boat

 

 

 

splitting hairs

on rails of disbelief

love sits atop

an unmade pedestal

waiting to forego

 

the ugly

the truant

the bestial

saints with shattered halos

dancing doomsday dichotomies

 

because they can no longer fly

amongst a sky 

of vicarious hate

 

splitting, sitting

at the right hand of 

a displeased God

who ponders reasons

to exonerate the empty souls

 

from existence

and start over

from scratch.

 

 

erin-cilberto

10/27/24

Reviews

[GlendaK]

We are supposed to rely on JESUS!

I think that is the root of our problems!

Hey! Guys! This man, the Son of God came to Earth to DIE so we won't need to sacrifice animals for their blood everytime we sin we just repent in JESUS' NAME!

But everybody is neglecting that! He DIED so we can do that a million, a zillion times!

(Thanks for the poesy. It's awesome!)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you.
j.

[Relic]

The ugly, the truant, the bestial, seem to be around a lot these days. People say these times feel different. I agree. But I see no turning back, and that's what scares me.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I know...no turning back.
sad state of affairs,
j.

[Vol]

Jacob...
From what I've seen of modern life... judgement should be short and sweet, what with nothing left but empty souls.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for your input, Vol,
j.

[Pryde Foltz]

Jacob you always sit the words so masterfully on the page. I am in awe of that. To the lazy angels. A good soul must be nurtured into existence. They should get off their fantastic tuffets and do some angelling. LOL. Or says I.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for your kind review, Pryde,
j.

[Desert Knave]

This really fits with the ominous cloud that I feel hanging over everything ... and I personally do not see it getting better, but much worse. My Ark will have to be 80 proof I fear. Great write. ~Jim

[jacob erin-cilberto]

80 proof? That will sink the boat, ha ha.
thanks, Jim,
j.

[Soren]

I love the opening two lines "splitting hairs on rails of disbelief" Looking at most people and their actions and beliefs would make me to want to start over as well. The question would be who you would choose to be Noah. A very thought provoking poem.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

That, my friend, is a good question....
I would be Methuselah, due to my age....but I would not remember any of my own prophecies...
j.

[Ern M. Yoshimoto]

what a great, brooding, ominous, foreboding poem about armageddon. every culture has their own version of the end of days because all of us know that it is inevitable. whether it is man or nature or God that destroys us all, our species will not live on forever. the way you painted this landscape in such dark and gritty imagery evokes the sense of dread that we ought to feel. but, as an optimist, i interpreted your title as a hint of hope -- maybe a few good souls can be saved from annihalation and go on to build a better one from the bottom up.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

a hint of.....
thank you for your words, Ern.
j.

[Ern M. Yoshimoto]

if you ever felt the depths of despair i have, a small hint of hope means A LOT.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Yes, I have felt them....and that hint saved me.

[Tumi]

"Start Building the Boat" is a powerful poem that explores love amid negativity. The imagery is striking, and the contrast adds depth. the hopeful ending about starting over is inspiring. Overall, it’s a captivating piece!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, tumi,
j.

[Sami Khalil]

Safety boat or Ark of Noah is long gone and we are still searching for it physically and literally.
God wanted to start over, but came to find out humans are the same or getting worse.
I thought He was all knowing. Makes someone think.
I see world War 3, but this time it will be worse than the other 2; I hate to say it.
An excellent take on wars, hate, nationalism, superior ideologies and so forth.
Humans don't want to live and let live in honor, dignity and justice. Oh, well! We see the results.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i think 3 will be worse also, Sami.
thank you for your words,
j.

[Sami Khalil]

Yes siiiirrrrr. You are welcome sir Jacob

[andrew mitchell]

I think fake media started a very long time ago. You never see angels on cave walls and I haven't seen a mermaid yet. Must get my eyes tested. Loved the imagery J.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I am still looking for a mermaid as well.