that ship has sailed

that ship has sailed

 

 

goodbye to eloquent standing

my voice failed the moment

the audience sat starefully 

 

chewing their mints methodically

expecting strict verse

and getting just a few askew

words in a mutinous cacophony

 

the poems did not want to be read aloud

they were embarrassed by their own sound

no voice could assuage

 

the audience sat starefully

unable to digest

what they were hearing

 

then it was time for the snacks

laced with critique

and court marshals 

for the mutineers.

 

 

erin-cilberto

10/24/24 

Reviews

[andrew mitchell]

Mutiny on the bounty! Will the poet and the poems walk the plank? At least uninterested the audience didn’t say off with his head. It seems like everyone was bored, a formality maybe. A most entertaining write with comical consequences.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Yes, this poet still has his head....barely.
j.

[Lorry]

That is why anything I write is for thought only and not spoken.
"then it was time for the snacks
laced with critique
and court marshals
for the mutineers.".... Exactly!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, Lorry,
j.

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

Love this Jacob well done
Have a nice weekend

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, Julie,
you have a nice one, also.
j.

[Red Brick Keshner]

What gruelling moments, these times can be, and I shall never envy anyone in said position nor wish it in others when such befalls me!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

it came from a dream...thank you, Freds,
j.

[apennylate]

What an absolute banger.
Loved this.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thanks, pennylate,
j.

[apennylate]

From "methodically" to "cacophony", brilliant.

[Dave W.]

I would be scared to read any of my poems to a crowd and then critique would be painful. This poem put me there and boy I like this, anything that transports me somewhere else from reading I love. Thank you for sharing.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for your kind words, Dave,
j.

[Dave W.]

Of course, i hope you have a good day