October's Fever

October's Fever

 

the eclipse shields the pain

a heart in permeating shadow

the sun in her life dotes no more

slowly she is covered in darkness

 

love's clarity is blinding her

she knows there are ways to protect

from what she feels

but it is too late for precautions.

 

it is what it is

the eyes of her emotions 

are burnt beyond use

 

but what she sees inside

becomes brighter than ever

when the light returns to normal

in her blighted soul.

 

 

erin-cilberto

10/1/24

Reviews

[Marie]

The weather affects some people, but especially the change of season's which has a deep impact on them. With evenings closing in, darkness coming earlier, some allow themselves to be blanketed in it and dark thoughts and feelings develop in this time. It can be a living hell for those people until the light of Springtime dawns again. Lovely use of metaphor and a fine choice of both words and depiction to get your message across to your reader. Sublime inking, dear J... Thank you for sharing,..

[Patricia Wedel]

dearest Jacob... now that I am eighty-four... I am experiencing the Light as never before. The October Winds begin to dance as though Romance were Orchestrations of Beautiful Melodies to bring Happiness. softly, Pat

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you dear Pat,
j.

[Desert Knave]

I guess the beauty of love is that precautions are never quite sufficient. ~Jim

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, never quite,
j.

[John the Baptist]

"It is what it is." That pretty much tells the tale. The lady is guided by her dark feelings and seems headed for trouble.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, John....yes guided by feelings and maybe trouble happens when those feelings are dark.read moreThank you, John....yes guided by feelings and maybe trouble happens when those feelings are dark.
j.

[redzone]

Jacob, your metaphors are profound. Using the dimming, then regaining of this woman's confidence as metaphor for Autumn turning to Winter and then to Spring and Summer. We lose light, the days grow shorter and for many, it is a time of emotional disturbance as well.
Curt

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I appreciate your review very much, Curt.
j.

[Soren]

Emotional pain is probably the worst type of pain. Intractable, unceasing, piercing it gives no break to the bearer. The metaphor is multifacited. Nicely done Jacob.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for your words, Soren,
j.