Clarity

Clarity 

 

 

Oedipus in his lonely state of mind

dreamed of being back in his mother's womb

safe, coddled

away from his crooked fate

still with his fetus eyes

gawking at internal futures

 

unbecoming what he was bound to be

filled with wisdom

blind

but 

Free.

 

 

10/7/24

erin-cilberto

Reviews

[carl]

I read Antigone for the first time some moths ago. What a strange tale of woe. enjoyed your piece and the unique format - very nice. carl

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Yes, ,a very strange tale.
Thanks for your kind words, carl,
j.

[John the Baptist]

Poor sucker had no Idea he'd make Freud rich.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

very rich!

[Sami Khalil]

Let me clarify in clarity: What goes around will come around; beware what you wish for; you can't escape your fate.
You practice evil, you will get evil. You practice goodness you will get goodness.
I like the mythical Greek story of him and the lessons to be learned. Better than stupid parables.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I appreciate what you said....and lots of agreement.
thank you, Sami,
j.

[Sami Khalil]

Yes siiiirrrrr. You are welcome sir Jacob.

[Ken Simm.]

Hmmm. Interesting physiological assessment in beautiful words. As the old New York joke used to go As long as he loves his Mama.
Interesting and succinct. Lacking any prejudgment but whole in itself..

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Ken,
j.

[Tumi]

"A profound exploration of Oedipus' inner turmoil. Your words masterfully convey the longing for safety and freedom from fate. great poem.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, tumi,
j.

[Red Brick Keshner]

What a fate: blindness and foetus-eyes! Very striking poetic assertions j. Much enjoyed!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, Red,
j.

[Arundass TP]

I love greek mythologies amd myths. You created a wonderful poem out of it Sir.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for your kind words, Arundass,
j.

[redzone]

What an ironic twist: "Blind, but Free". Such is the way of Greek mythology, ending in tragedy. It was a time when "FATE" ruled people's destinies. I think capitalizing the word Free adds to this irony, Jacob. Especially since Oedipus had already fulfilled the prophecy. Joseph Conrad, Somerset Maugham, and Albert Camus, come to mind when discussing the "fate of humanity".

Anyway, your poem has again taken me to tragedy in the human condition. Thanks for the journey!!
Curt

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for the in-depth review, Curt.
j.

[Marie]

A very finely penned in-depth write in this poem based on Greek Myth! Wondering if we can every unbecome what is allotted to us via Fate? Wondering if his desires are where The Oedipus Complex comes from? A great write, dear J with a wealth of meaning. Thank you for sharing...

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for the insightful reply, Marie.
j.

[Marie]

Most welcome always, dear J...

[berenongur]

unbecoming what he was bound to be
filled with wisdom
That's great, I loved it

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, berenongur!
j.