Two Ends create a Beginning

Two Ends create a Beginning

filaments

of love laced together

two elements

staring into each other's eyes

the connection causes light

strong as solar energy

compassionate as the sun's smile

warm as the intrepid moon

on a summer's night

shadows embrace

the ink black darkness

gives cover

the light vanishes

but the kiss is electric

short circuiting the reality

That is written in fiction

but makes such a good story

when embellished with 

eccentric lines of poetry

open to interpretation.

erin-cilberto

7/30/24

Reviews

[Andrew John]

So many lines of poetry can be eccentric (and I've read so many of yours, dear Jacob!). How often is our reality "short-circuited"? And the idea that darkness - already rather black - is actually ink black! Nice one.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for the kind review, Andrew,
j.

[Abhilash Hegde]

such a captivating title. this drew me in and so did the poem. the images, lovely. enjoyed reading it. thanks jacob for sharing.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Abhilash,
j.

[Patricia Wedel]

dear Jacob… it is said that at the End of the Rainbow is a POT of GOLD… which could be a New Beginning if the TRUTH Be Told. I suppose “Time will Tell. Your Poem reminds me of the Fable of William Tell. A good Shot will Save the Day. Fortunately, Pat

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I am still searching for the end of that rainbow...
j.

[Vol]

Jacob,
Reality tends to suck more than it doesn't tend to suck. So spicing things up with a nice sprinkle of eccentric poetry makes it bearable at least and desirable at most...
An electric kiss in the dark is my favorite short circuit, as shocking as that sounds...
Vol

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Poetry makes anything bearable...words are healers..
thank you, Vol,
j.

[emmajoygreen]

Magnetic attraction wedded to emotion without - a hint of negativity! Perhaps?

[jacob erin-cilberto]

maybe something turned from that to positive?
thank you, em,
j.

[Tumi]

Well written great metaphor and simile put to place
A nice story as well
Two ends meet to start a beginning
Very good

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for your kind revew, tumi,
j.

[Soren]

A great metaphor and just as the last stanza states open to interpretation. Stated very nicely Jacob

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Soren,
j.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Love this. We has poets heighten our feelings in verse in order to captivate the readers attention.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

at least we try to...thank you, Cowboy,
j.