delightful dandelions in the perfect lawn of poetry

delightful dandelions in the perfect lawn of poetry

if we are too strict

or

too disciplined with our syllables

too rampant with our rhyme

too splashy or buzz drunk with 

our onomatopoeia

if we are iambic nazis 

the pentameter will break

out of the concentration camp

of campy diction

if we alliterate to such an extent

that Sally gets tired of selling seashells

by the seashore 

and forfeits her fortuitous 

frills

for a few colorfully, contextual crabs

if we rewrite to death

can we bring a poem

back to life

Do we have that Jesus power

to procure the original meaning

or will we lose the human effect

to discipline 

and strict unbecoming

will we still have a poem 

to move the readers

or just a strait jacket

jumble of lobotomized

linear thinking that

touches nothing.

erin-cilberto

7/18/24

Reviews

[Chris Shaw]

Natural is best and those dandelions soring up everywhere. They are bright and sunny. No straight jacket required and rewriting poems can kill them stone dead. This is a wonderful write. Writing from the heart or direct from the muse works best.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for your kind review, Chris...
j.