uncoupled

uncoupled

 

 

the parents wept for the children

separation anxiety

perplexed state of love

arranged detention

 

dictated joy

there was never a smile

The tear burned the cheek

the blade sharp as the daggered

 

censure she felt

as mortality beckoned

 

the parents wept for the children

the parents wept for themselves

 

but they learned nothing

and life goes on 

breathing

While the children

do not.

 

erin-cilberto

7/8/24

Reviews

[mabel mae]

very emotional. it doesn’t use the reader’s sight, rather their touch. their emotion. the use of ‘separation anxiety’ really shows how strong the parent-child relationship is and how great the loss is. just wow. thank you for the read. -mabel

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for your very kind review, mabel mae,
j.

[Tumi]

the tune of your lovely poem was emotional till the end
it shows the pains faced by loved one family, wife, parent, children
when they get separated
enjoyed reding

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, tumi,for your kind words.
j.

[Fabian G. Franklin]

Life is precious, tomorrow is never promised, to any of us. We need to make the most of the here and now because, in reality, it's all we really have. Yesterday is a memory, tomorrow is a hope but today is a gift we need to use wisely. I enjoyed the read. F.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Yes, we really do need to make the most of it...I agree...thank you, Fabian,
j.

[Soren]

Jacob my friend your poems are often more than what they seem on the surface. Literally this poem may speak of war and loss by separation or death or of children taken by the law for neglect or abuse or even the growing separation that comes with age as viewpoints vary. However, I read something deeper. What are our children but our legacy, all that we leave behind. They are our memories and what we have worked for our biological seeds that go on beyond us. When lost we weep for them and for ourselves. Life and its purpose has lost its meaning. "life goes on breathing While the children do not" Another emotional write with deep philosophical meaning.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for your very kind words, Soren,
j.

[Ted Kniffen]

Uncoupling , intentional or not leaves scars ... gaping holes where Love used to dwell ... and the tears are necessary to deal with the grief.

Children bear the brunt.
Parents weep but seldom know the reason.

And yet Life goes on.

Well done j.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you very much for your words, Ted,
j.

[Poetic Beauty]

This to me speaks of the loss of a child/children. For most parents that is their worst waking nightmare.

This sounds like a Rocky relationship between parents and the children and much trauma has been created.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes...
thank you for your insights, P.B.
j.

[Patricia Wedel]

dearest Jacob… we love ❤️ the Children and gather their Smiles… praying. 🙏 praying for a World where Songs are visions of a places where Law and Order Reign.. Amen

[jacob erin-cilberto]

as Cat Stevens sang "Where do the children play?"

[Robert Trakofler]

My good friend Jacob I have a few opinions on uncoupling... first from having been separated from my birth mother and orphaned and then adopted and being separated from my parents when they got divorced when I was very young... then the numerous foster children that I had become attached to that all were eventually returned to their families (a happy thing... but sad too) but since then I was reunited with my birthmother and gained two half siblings! So its true what you say we they never learn indelible is the word for true coupling and tho actions can negate the coupling... the bonds never truly disappear my brother:)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for sharing that, brother bunny....I appreciate you.
j.

[John the Baptist]

We have here a picture of parents and children being separated, but we do not know why. Because it is an "arranged detention," I somehow feel the government, specifically the law, is involved. Perhaps it is an execution that will do the separating. At any rate, the parents keep on living, while the children apparently do not. A somber, moving piece.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Yes...a Romeo and Juliet influence at work. Many circumstances that we could deem similar.
thank you, John.