even they weep

even they weep

the hound dog

parlays a sly smile

behind its real expression

maybe the sadness is imagined

maybe the scent he fears

are his own dreams

and the kamakazi feeling

he has on waking,

sounding one last cry 

for his lost love.

erin-cilberto

7/8/24

Reviews

[Fabian G. Franklin]

Ever watch them paw the air in their sleep? I used to say my dog was chasing rabbits in his dreams. And it might well have been. He so loved to chase the bunnies. I've never owned a hound but I've been friends with a few. Good dogs. I enjoyed. F.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Yes, and it is pretty funny...
Thank you, Fabian...
j.

[Desert Knave]

So much sibilance scattered through this and it reads beautifully. ~Jim

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, Jim,
j.

[apennylate]

I do not have words for how profoundly satisfying your words are.
The meter is what gets me.
The inner rhyming and lilt.
I enjoy it.
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You encapsulate this method of writing
I wonder if I am waking up to merely crash down, sometimes.

"A sly smile behind real expression, maybe sadness is imagined."

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for your very kind words, Chase,
j.

[Weeping willow]

Beautifully expressed, felt these words ;-}

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, willow!
j.

[Soren]

Wow! As always Jacob you have a knack at capturing the essence of feeling behind the words. Yes I have heard this howl and it sends shivers down the spine. A howl of grief so deep pain so sharp that it cuts to the bone. Not even the widow's shriek is as deep. Love your wording and pacing they make all the difference. Congratulations on another masterpiece

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for your very kind review, Soren.
j.

[nadia dmitri]

Wow, always just such amazing word choice. Always so loaded and masterfully brief. Great work :))

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, nadia,
j.

[Thomas W Case]

Superb work. Things aren't always as they seem at first glance.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

No, they certainly aren't...thanks, Thomas.
j.